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Deeds Ch. 02

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous05/20/08

Okay with the benefit of doubt - bring it on!

Is he going to be a wimp or get "justifiable" revenge? Once a slut, once a slut! Author - great start, do not follow the usual "reconciliation at any costs" fucked up plot line. Good luck!

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by Anonymous05/20/08

Different

Not bad, will keep reading, THANKS.

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by Anonymous05/20/08

Chapters are still too short, and very one topic

You need to get into the story instead of posting one line jerks. Since she dont wanta be no "white man's whore" but wants one for a lover and is with a black man. I guess she wants to be a rich black man's gold digger and the mistress to a married white man. What do you call that type of woman, oh yes I remember, a whore or if you want to be polite a prostitute. You know a woman who fucks for money, and fakes orgasms. But then I guess you could all stay at home moms and wives prostitutes couldnt you, the fuck for money, their lifestyle.

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by bruce2205/20/08

No One can complain yet.

Everything has been nicely set in place though I admit that
it is tough to wait until the next page...

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by Anonymous05/21/08

Actually

Actually we can complain. The story chapters are way to short to the point of being silly. Finish the thing and then post it. I for one wont read it any longer but may check it out when complete. 1 had potential so I read 2 but that set the pattern. Done...

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by Anonymous05/21/08

witheld judgement

I will withhold judgement untill I've read the full story - I hope the author doesn't a)wait too long to post, and b) does not post in such small amounts.

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by FD4512/26/11

Um

Is this really dangerouslydead?

It is very poorly written.

He didn't recognize Mary Walker's voice when he called her? Nor she his? Really?

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by Tavadelphin09/26/13

Still good

Looking forward to more

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by Anonymous09/20/14

Drawn out too much

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by tazz31709/20/14

AND NOW THE PARAMETERS HAVE CHANGED

so begins the next burden. TK U MLJ LV NV

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