All Comments on 'Mother' Lament'

Liked the piece. The emotion was there, but it is buried under too many words. You might consider rewriting it and removing any words that aren't ABSOLUTELY needed to get the emotions across. (Believe me - I know this issue. Signed, Queen of Too Damn Many Words) ;)

P.S. I would like to suggest that you get involved with the Poetry Feedback and Discussion forum on Lit's BBS. There are some GREAT poets there that can give you terrific suggestions and assistance. Here's the link: http://forum.literotica.com