by Xie_Lei
Enjoyed the whole thing! Love, lust and sex. Good combo. I'll be reading more from you! <3 Liilian, KR.
I really liked this story. The combination of your two protagonists' personality worked brilliantly and the story was really entertaining as well as hot. Can't wait to read more from you.
The storyline and the characters were so hot yet well written! I loved how you gave each their own intricate, detailed background.
The only disappointment was that the series was only 3 chapters long... :)
Perhaps you'll change your mind?
Wow! ! This is a hot story i love all 3 chapters so hot. . So loving. . . . It got me off gud thanks
I loved it - all 3 chapters! It felt like I was reading a yaoi novel/manga (especially with the Japanese lesson). I really like Kei and Jake's personalities too. Great work! I'd love to read more of your works if you write more.
Good stuff there! I've never read another story with any other lanuage besides french or spanish. This was a very very pleasent surprise! Loved it! Keep it up!
First started reading yaoi manga then novels. This story is good enough to be a Yaoi Novel by June Manga. Please do more stories. Thanks
awesome! i'll love to see june license this and the hot bods in manga form ^-^ fufufu~ great work! i'm a yaoi otaku <333 and proud of it! =P cuz i can uderstand the jap without needing to look at the translation. lol <3
The whole tone of this story is nasty, turning sex into a weapon, presumed affection into dumb lust. The Japanese element is a poorly used gimmick.
Nice story...realLy wanna see this story in yaoi manga!!keisuke is so damnHOT...
that was a funny and sweet story that i really loved. i look foward to more like it.
Excellent job. It reminds me alot of reading Yaoi manga. I could almost see the pictures playing in my head. Very good story.
you know bad boys reLly turn me on, and I get what you're sayin about the whole bisexual preferences thing I'm the same way if you ever wanna you know hook up lemme know...
yep, your japanese really sucks big time:
it's itai not iitai
and kanjisasete not kanjiru sasete
Hontou ni utsukushii no Hontou no utsukushii
and Ore mo iku zo na no?? I don't know what to say...madness...
and your way of using uke/seme is just weird man
Some people are so rude! Jap crap? Er, the guy was Japanese would be wholly weird if his mother tongue never came out during the throws of passion!
Anyway,great story dude and please keep writing!
Say dinkyfruits. Jap crap huh? So now you're a racist too. Well, I'm not surprised.
Why do you have to be such an ass to most of the writers here? Do you get your tiny rocks off on making unenlightened and disrespectful comments to the writers? Have you ever written anything in your life other than graffiti? You really are a pathetic piece of shit.
Thank you, Randaltri. I've been seeing dinky's negative comments all over. None are useful for anything. Think his name refers to the size of a certain body part?
Please write more about these two and just ignore the haters, i have read this one four times and i love it each time i read it, so please write about Jake and Kei, i want to know if there relationship will survive Kei's overbearing father and neglectful mother and if Kei finds the courage to fight for his love??
Please don't let the haters win....Your writing is better than that!!
It's one of the best I've read omg it was phenomenal loved it wow....i'm so happy right now wish there was more i'm looking out for more of your stuff good luck
And I will re iterate ignore the critics I think this story is great and it is the second time I have read it and yes I too would like to know if their relationship progresses as both Kei and Jake have overcome this hurdle but they both still have demons to overcome
You can't leave us hanging like that !!!!!1..way to many unanswered questions! Great story.
I. Love. That. Song. And also, l loved this story. Probably more than the song. Unknown author, I will be awaiting submissions.
this s just general, declarative type of feed back. The story, the writing, the pace, basically everything about it is fantastic. -Terriffic. Well crafted, well executed, so we'll done.
Thanks for sharing! I love reading well written stories and this is well.. Cute. I love when two guys fall in love.
Great story But if Jake grew up on the street and went from one foster home to another, how did he manage to get to college? 22
Not being familiar with any previous episodes, it was a bit too hard to grasp the former relationship between the two men. I could not understand where Jake's problem lay in his relation to Kei, or what Kei had done to hurt him.
Anyway, this episode (or chapter) was very well written. Best wishes for future writing.
Well written and interesting. Gave it four stars rather than five because I had to keep checking the bottom of the page for translations.
i wish you had continued writing cuz i just found you and enjoyed reading your stories and i learned some Japanese lol
I enjoyed it. I always look for vulnerability in men. Nothing turns me on more than the gentle side of a macho man. I once saw in a video of two incredible men raping this twink. I was angry about what they were doing. It was so real it compelled me to watch. They left him there lying in cum and urine however in the next scene the worst of the guys returned and cleaned him up and told him how sorry he was. He was so gentle and caring. I forgot the brutality of the rape and I realize it was for titillating purposes.