All Comments on 'How I Noticed Jared'

great premise..but the guys should have been hot muscled jocks..nothing more sex charged than big muscled jock barefeet(think phelps's size 13's)

Good premise, as stated before. But you are right in choosing the perfect personality for Jared. A jock would never work in this story. I would like to see this story continue. You could easily have several more chapters. What do you think?

Don't stop! Very intriguing beginning but how do they continue?! The suspense is killing me!

I loved this story. I really hope you continue!

More please!

I agree with some of the other comments - another chapter of this story would be very good. I'm quite interested in where it would go from here.

I love it!!!! 5*****!!!! Very wonderful!!! Has a darling plot & personality to the charaters!!!! I would surely want more!!!!! Can't wait! ;D

That was gorgeous 8D It's a crime that no one's commented on this yet. It's hot, but not too detailed, and a reeeeeaaallly fun read.

~Mozzarella

very nice and unique. It screams for a continuation though!

Are you going to write any more chapters to this?

Such a nice story and no follow up! What a shame :(

This is fantastic. You really capture the inner conflict. In particular I love the power dynamic switch, the narrator being called out and his fantasy then with the potential to become real!

Of course we all hope for more but for now I can imagine where it goes :)