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normal jeannormal jeanalmost 15 years ago
:)

this poem was better than I expected. There are a few places it could be tightened, in my opinion, you should lose the ellipses and shorten the line "little tiny" one or the other is too much.

The rhyme was not forced, it's simple but effective and the fact you didn't end rhyme is a good choice.

I enjoy reading you,

NJ

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