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Not bad
Though he should have done the girls, the hell with Audrey.
what?
are you fucking retarded? so because he couldnt get over her cheating (it was cheating even if she didnt fuck those bikers) asap, she wants to move on after a few months. wow, she really did love him and she showed him that by fucking mark almost the whole time they were seperated and the whole time they got back together. shes selfish, immature and a lying whore. even after everything that bitch did, he came to her apologizing for being a "stick in the mud" and unforgiving and ask her to come back to him? jesus, thats not love, no matter how you dress it up.
Way to go, Bob!
One of your better stories, in my opinion. Personally, I would have a LOT more difficulty getting back together with Audrey. She proved (twice) that when things don't go the way she thinks they should, instead of talking to her husband, she turns to another man. She knows she's on thin ice and still she has to keep Mark interested, just in case? This woman is not committed to her marriage and her husband, she is not committed to her affair and her lover, she is only committed to looking out for Audrey.
Interesting ending
It was almost as if the last scene was the whole reason for
the existence of the story. The motorcycle gang was the central item of the first chapter but almost disappeared in the second chapter. Really I did not develop any feelings about any of the protagonists but the plotlines were interesting..
The story was very good.
Could I, would I take back such a woman as Audrey? No she doesn't know what she wants. Rob hasn't changed, he is still a 'stick in the mud' so what is she really going back to? The answer is the same man she left. She knew he was like this when they got married so she should have really told him what she wanted. I hope they do stya together but with the wife's previous record it's not too likely is it.
pretty lousy.
After Rob lets Audrey back into his life... she leaves him a 2nd time!???
even though she did say she would stick with him "no matter what...."
so how does Rob react? he goes after her?
No wonder JPB's stories are all about super wimp men wioh no balls and no sense of self and integrity
a New Low in Pathetically stupid
Audrey tell him to leave... and because of HER interactions with DJ and the Motorcycle Gang ...Rob's is ALMOST killed several times!
Yet Rob NEVER once brings up this ppoint.
Rob says I cant trust you Audrey. Ok fair enough
Rob says he was Bitterly hurt by the way she said told him you are No good and I want more. Again that is fine as far as it goes.
BUT... Rob was almost killed twice and this fact he never brings up. Instead Rob after learning from several sources Audrey never had actual sex with DJ.... lets her back in her life.
Then Audrey leaves him a 2nd time .... and now he has go after HER at the end of the story?
fucking absurd
Second Part does not match First Part of Story!
Good writing but your heroic efforts to redeem Audrey really does not fly. First, Rob, in the first Part, is a no BS regular working stiff who when confronted with his cheating wife and lover gives them the boot. He did not ask Audrey about her feelings or aspirations. She made it clear when she brought to their home DJ that Rob was being replaced. Audrey was responsible for 2 attempts on his life, being on guard for the rest of his life and the death of Kari. In this Second Part you try to reduce her mistakes to just taking a few bike rides and smoking a joint or two.
So Rob finds out that she is cheating on him with her asshole boss and she had been seeing him since the time she started the trial separation process. Even if you buy the notion that she fought off an entire biker gang she kept her boyfirend boss around as an "exit" out of her attempt to reconciled with Rob. She confronts him about her affair and walks away again from the marriage. Rob like a puppy dog pledges to "really try" to make a go of it if she comes back to him. What the hell does Rob have to make up for? At this point the Rob of the second part does not match the original character. Aren't there any honest women out there who wants a stand up guy?
Thanks
Thanks for the story. Do I like the ending yes and no. It could have gone so many ways.I liked all the submissions, and yours was good also, you gave love a chance, could I would I, I am glad that situation has not ever arrived.Thanks for the entertainment and lighting the fires of so many fun to read comments.Mike from Texas
Chapter 2.....
doesn't even come close to following chapter 1. Nuff said
The key is that jpb tends to.....
....portray women as simpletons who only serve as appendages to the men in his stories.So attempts to imbue in them complex reasoning seem to fall short.I totally agree with any reader who questions why he never confronted Audrey about the trail of sorrow she left(includes dj)but like I said not even bothering to investigate what's in this woman's head just shows howjpb diminishes them in his mind.Well at least in this story!With this author,next time could bring change.
Too Frighteningly True
Not a "Virtual" story, Bob, but an amazingly realistic story of how life can and does quite often work out for us. Thank you.
my thoughts
Well I liked it even if some others did not. Thank you for your hard work.
better and better
I have read your stories for a long time, and recently, for some reason, you have moved into a different league. Your recent stories are some of the best I have encountered, and are VERY entertaining. Keep up the good work--
All the Best,
S C
Much improved Plots
I can see remarkable improvement in your stories in the last 6 months.
Ambivalent
I enjoyed this part of the story. It didn't have as much impact as Chapter 01 but was still well above average. Audrey's character development left much to be imagined, which could be part of your plan. The story begs to be continued by you. You know the characters; you know where the story goes. Again, I enjoyed it. Thank you.
Cuckold arriving on track 3
No matter how you put it WACC to the max
Damn Bob!!!
Half of your stuff is just plain shit. The other half is like this one, outstanding!!! In this story the only real people was Kari and the twins, once the girls got their heads out.
You are a master at maintaining a love/hate relationship with your readers for sure and certain.
Exceptional story, Bob.
It works for me, too bad that Kari had to get killed for it to work.
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