All Comments on 'The Lady from Sibiu (Sonnet #4)'

The sonnet is a good form to help develop your writing, but you should give it a try with meter, that's where the real challenge is. Even if you abandon the meter, read this outloud and you will feel where the rhythm stumbles. You are not just working to get ten syllables in a rhyme scheme, you want the words to flow comfortably, not like you are straining to reach that rhyme on the tenth syllable.

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leaves the shrubs, all is open. TK U MLJ LV NV