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Mickey's Revenge

byJust Plain Bob©
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by Anonymous

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by Poizon6902/20/10

BOB? Did you enjoy writing this story?

Hated the story, every single person in this story is worthless. Not that you care either way do you?

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by mcwiii02/20/10

More Bob Puke

The only appropriate end to this story is 4 shots from the 870 and a quick trip to Mexico.

And oh, poor Bobby doesn't want anonymous input anymore!

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by hansbwl02/20/10

I'm amazed

that it is at all possible to cook up something so bad!!!!

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by louguy3502/20/10

Hansbwl is correct.

This tripe is beyond belief.

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by rainbow00102/20/10

Nothing to say...

My mother always told me if you can't say anything nice...

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by jasonnh02/20/10

Awful

Not one character that was worth feeling anything about except disgust. He had the gun, he should have just used it and then reloaded and turned it on himself. There is no marriage to "save" here. And despite what the characters say, there is no "love" either. Nothing really erotic either.

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by Alberta Al02/20/10

Not my cup of Tea

This is a little extreme for my liking. Writing was good.

Please post a warning at the beginning of stories of this type so that I can avoid them and read the more 'vanilla' stories

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by terrydavid02/20/10

At least your consistent JPB - same over the top wimp ass male character and the over-used "slut wife - nigger" plot devices.

As previously stated, you are very consistent with your themes and plots. Did not read this pathetic effort because the comments almost always give a good indication of the cluck-wimp direction. However, your efforts should make the "wimp & humiliated male / reconciliation at any cost" crowd happy and running off to suck gay cock. Sigh ... pathetic at best but consistent as always.

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by digdaddyrich02/20/10

why didn't he just use the shotgun on himself

The poor wimp didn't have enough balls to shoot the three black guys, and his stupid slut wife, he could at least shot himself and got over his misery.

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by bigchefwayne02/20/10

Easily the Worst Story of Your's That I Have Read

This story is not well written, contains little to no plot development and one-dimensional characters. This is the first time I have given any story a one star rating. I have always respected the fact that the author took the time and made the effort with those of us on this site. In this case, no respect can be shown to either the author or the husband,

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by bigguy32302/20/10

I gotta hand it to ya Bob I have a love hate relationship with your stories....

I love'em or I hate'em. Nothing in between. This one I hate A LOT>

I has no redeeming qualities. Sorry, better luck next time.

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Unbelievable

You've actually made me feel sorry for him. As wrong as he was....and he WAS wrong even though we can understand his reasons....she has turned him into a very sympathetic figure. I feel bad for him that he has no self-respect.

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by Pistolpackinpete02/22/10

One of the JPB stories that make you...

...want to lock him up in Dark Wanderer forever.A Repost, to me. And no more anons? What a bunch of faggots this site is breeding.Pretty soon it'll be Marquis of Queensbury(Or Marquess of Queensberry to you Brits) and bloody scones all around.

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by sexmate02/23/10

Another Bad story!

Why?

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by BoringOldGuy02/23/10

What a piece of crap!!!

Okay so he cheated and she rubbed his nose in it. Now they are even! What he should do is let them come in then kill the bastards and the bitch. He can claim self defense and she was shot by mistake. Their cum in her will be enough proof of what she was up to and he can claim they threatened to tie him up, make him watch, then kill him.

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by SleeplessinMD202/26/10

One Common Theme in All JPB's stories...

is that the woman is a slut. Even the stories were the men are slutd they are enabled by slutty women usually married. I enjoy his stories as very creative fantasies. What is amusing how readers take them so seriously. In this story we are told that Mickey is this idea wife and mother except for sex. The husband tries to wider her horizon sexually but she refuses. He goes out during his business trips to make up for what he is missing. Mickey finds out and exact her revenge. She fucks 30 men in ways she never did with her husband, fucks her lover while on the phone with her husband, and bring home several of her lovers for her meeting with her husband. Let's face it at that time she has her husband over a barrel - he has with no proof, 3 kids and finiancial ruin in the divorce. But Mickwey's revenge is too extreme. Given the unprotected sex and STDs the husband has to do something to address this or he will be putting his kids at risk. What is a succeccful businessman to do? ANSWER: Go along until you can shift the balance in your favor. Make up with her so that she thinks things will go her way. Go on the next few business trips normal frequency until her guard does down then BOOM. It is likely that her lovers have police records and are invovled in iilegal activities. Once Mickey starts hooking then he can get evidence. This story begs for a sequel.

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by Mandy0108/20/10

Well Bob...you've outdone yourself...again

SleeplessinMD2 and just about everyone who posted are right when they think there's no one to like in this story.

Open for a sequel? Sure but I'm not touching this one with a forty foot barg pole...lol

I will give you this one though, I got hot under the collar with both the spouses, and as I have said before that when you evoke emotions then you have done a good job of conveying your message. The problem we have is the message itself!

Speaking from a purely female point of view...I don't know of any woman who'd go that far to get revenge on their mate. This was absolutely a male fantasy gone wrong...lol

I dearly hope you went back on your meds after writing this piece?

This could have been a good revenge gone wrong tale. Alas it wasn't to be. I checked out the voting score on it to date and two point one six is better than I thought it'd be. I gave you two, but that was just to keep the status quo...And as the star says...I didn't like it much!.

Better luck next time Bob, you really are a good writer, it's just a pity that you got your head so far up your own arse that it must be hard to breath.

All the best anyway

Amanda

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by DWornock07/15/11

1*

Too crude, gross, and extreme.

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by HardYakka03/11/12

don't know

A bit too extreme for my liking
3*

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by BetterEnding04/06/12

Here is How to Improve This Story

He brings the boys back in and sits down to watch. After the four of them really get going, he pulls out the shotgun and points it at them. He says "Do not move a muscle, any of you. Mickey, you went way over the top babe. Part of the reason I found those women was because you would not do the things I wanted. Furthermore, I kept my affairs away from home. They were only seeing me so there was no issue with disease. And there were only a handful of them.

"For your revenge, you went out and fucked over thirty strangers, many of whom are probably high risk for disease. You also did all those things for them that you would not do for me. If you had, I would probably never have strayed.

"Then you bring them into our home, so they know where we live. For all I know you have been fucking them in front of the kids. And now you want to keep on fucking them and even entertain the idea of becoming a whore.

"Putting the financial issues aside, I cannot take the chance that the courts will award custody of our kids to you. I cannot have them exposed to your new lifestyle. I loved you, but you killed that."

Boom, boom, boom and three young men were dead. Mickey stared at him in shock.

"I hope your revenge was worth it babe. Perhaps those black cocks will be waiting for you in the next life. It will hurt to lose you and I will probably go to hell for this, but I have no choice."

Boom.

He takes a deep breath, cleans up some loose ends, such as destroying the letters, etc., and dials 911. He gives his address and says he thinks he murdered four people. When the cops arrive he tells them "I got home early from a business trip. My wife was not home and being bushed, I went upstairs to take a nap. I woke up and heard noises downstairs. When I got close enough, I saw what I thought were three black men raping my wife. I ran back and got my shotgun to use to scare them off. When I came back, I realized that it was not rape. She was a willing participant. I felt anger rage up inside and the next thing I knew, the four of them were laying there dead.

The verdict was "Not guilty by reason of temporary insanity."

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by semofuncpl308/26/12

Betterending

had it right. Definitely a 1 story. Seems you either have a 1 or 5.

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by chytown08/26/12

Keep.

Them coming BOB!!!!1

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by Overthefalls05/19/13

Oh HELL NO!

He needs to figure out how to kill them all, the wife included.

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by Overthefalls05/26/14

I re-read this and I figured out what JPB had planned

Hubby wants to go to the gangbang to either tape it or figure out who has the tape he watched. (BTW - no way someone is in his house and takes the tape out of the VCR without him seeing or hearing it). Once he has the tape, she's toast. She has a tape but he has a MUCH better tape. I wonder how her gangbang will play with her family and friends and the Family Court? She is about to get fucked big-time! I would prefer that Bob finish his own story, but we all know that will never happen.

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by Anonymous08/29/14

One little star

Only because I can't give stars in the negative. His wife's years of sexual hangups finally caused him to go elsewhere. She would not relent even though they apparently discussed her prudishness. So she goes nuclear and becomes a Queen of Spades? Knowing this is cuck-fiction it still doesn't play out right. Hubby had the shotgun and the upper hand. He should have kept her there, shot Jerome if he had to, and gotten that tape. Previous commenter was right, no one is sneaking in the house to get it. Throw that used whore out without anything. Destroy her and destroy them. Get the kids and keep the slut out. Once she starts making gangbang movies get the bitch declared an unfit parent. Where is FINISH THE DAMN STORY when we need him?

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by Tw0Cr0ws08/29/14

college fund ?

So she is going to turn tricks to pay back the money?
He has a PI follow her and record that, then get her arrested for prostitution.
While there are possibly a few judges that would give her child custody it would be very unlikely.
See how that goes with Sunday school and the church choir too.

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by Anonymous08/29/14

Out of Character

This guy admits to being selfish but still - discreet. Not right but, he wouldn't give uyp his Mickey for anything...until...

He would still be in front of the TV, he would take the tape, not call her and see a divorce attorney on Monday.

He would not take her condescending and disparaging demands but would play along, get a tape of his own edit it and then go for divorce.

JPB, the guy you described is a street wise business type and would not take any disrespect from anyone - especially the woman he loved.

Your story so it went the way you wanted it to go but...WE ALL KNOW, as much as he loved her, she is history and exposed...Hello Porn industry and Red Light district!!!

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by betrayedbylove08/30/14

Damn

Hard to believe this woman was a prude all her life until she received the pictures and saw his infidelity. I ain't buying it. Could have been a decent tale. Oh well.

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by tazz31708/30/14

THIS CUCK NEEDS TO COME UP WITH A PLAN B

POST-HASTE or become a bitchy-boy for ever. TK U MLJ LV NV

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by impo_5808/30/14

I like most of your stories JPB...But...

I like most of your stories JPB...But...I think you sometimes want to shock us with this kind of stories...It's well written, but a complete bullshit story...When in a marriage someone cheats, the marriage only survives with forgiveness, never making another wrong...

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by Anonymous08/30/14

One Star

This was pure trash. Cuckold lovers should fawn all over this one.

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