by Tropical_Passion_420
Your style and content is very good. Please continue. Especially what happens next.
but you need to provide more from wife's point of view. After all, she knows more than husband about what is happening to her body and mind and can therefore provide more accurate and better (hotter) info to the reader. You use language well.
But don't be surprised. We have a small group of people who think it is their duty to tell people on a sex site, what to think. Even though they know what the story line is going to be, they still read it and post their obligatory idiocy, as if anyone cares.
Ignore them...or better yet, delete their comments.
We all want to hear more, more of the lead-in and more about Jake's growing control of Jana.
My husband let me do that. Amazing!!!!!!! I still keep my black lover. We are together full time.
would have been nice to have some intro.. how did they get to this point?? but at least author got it right to keep husband and wife together I the same room