by furryfan
A very good and well written story, sounds very true. Unfortunatly the story is still being lived out every day and for the same stupid reasons.
No reason for me to be aroused during page one and crying on page 2, but I was. Just like Rose said, I'm not apologizing for it either. Just a wonderful story.
I love a well-done short story-- I forget who said that a good short story should be written as if were the last chapter of a good novel, but you proved it here. A good sense of place, good characters, good pacing, just a nice piece of work all around. Bravo!
Wonderful!!! Touching and romantic. That's what a story is supposed to be. The making love in the story like this makes it more erotic to read. Keep writing.
It's a shame that no one has posted a comment regarding your story because this is so much about true life, it is exceptional in its content a I for one enjoyed it regardless of the sad ending. Maybe you should send it to the pollies that send our young men to war.
Alan from Australia
A story that followed logically on with a nasty twist at the end. Worth the time to read!
This is one of the best "love stories" I have read on litertotica.. Thanks for a job well done.
Wonderful writing; you don't need constructive criticism from the average Lit reader. In two pages I fell in like and then in love and then had my heart broken even when I knew it was coming. Thank you for sharing your work.
One of if not your best story. At least to my way of reading. Thanks for sharing.