by Maria2394
though I might not (as a man) agree with the sentiment! I would love to lose the last line of the first verse so that the rhyme (and rhythm) flow on into verse two. Verses 3 and 4 feel polemic and don't flow for me, but without them it feels like there is a seamless join to verse 5. I hope you don't mind me saying so.
It is lovely to see your poems here again.
Can't relate much. And it's more about staking out a position than trying to make me relate. But as you say, it's dedication is for someone else. My man boobs fall out of it's jurisdiction.
The writing is beautiful. I expecially like that second strophe. It's painfully good. I don't like "and lost upon them..." as it's too passive, but maybe that's the point. I would've said "The joy is lost upon them in the bounce..." But mainly it is wonderful to see you writing here again. :)
I commented but it didn't show up! I think this is intensely personal and yet universal. The second strophe is especially good. I'd change the first line of the last strophe to make it active instead of passive. But mainly it's great to see you submitting a poem here again. :-)
From someone with enormous breasts and who grew up a bit of hippy, I am feeling you. I miss being able to go braless and I have friend with little perky boobs who don't do. It seems like a waste to me.
which he thinks keeps the poem a bit distant for him, but well done. Poet Gal detests bras and only wears them to work, so Poet Guy can relate to the sentiment.
I actually like this and see where you are coming from but no matter if those boobies are pert or not going braless has unfortunate consequences in later life as they head inevitably southwards!
Hey, comments on. So, second time, shorter title - change, needs a little more balance, title would be easiest. I told you a 5.
...congratulations on the red H - now, even if it goes pooofff you know it WAS there! :-)
Next - I love the strength here. Line 1 in the
4th verse might read better if "claim" replaced "possess".
Bras are my nemesis too. Men should never be allowed to design bras OR kitchen appliances.
Tess
Very insightful and well written poem. 5
I as a man… included within those that may, or may not agree, is of little consequence. What is important here, is that this freedom is a right of any or all women to express or not express as they see fit, and to be forced to conform to what may be known as the ‘socially accepted norm’ is a travesty in its self..
However, I do believe that, because of changing times and social perceptions, most men would agree that, rather than look upon those women who are uncomfortably bound by restraining apparel, they would prefer to look upon the sensual movements of a woman who does not put up with such confinements.
But of course, this is only my point of view.
Sincerely,
Jes_da_man
Dear Anon, I'm still here, just have not been writing. If you are my sweet MR, please know I will always love you and miss you