A beautiful story, but it seems things are going so well there must be obstacles ahead. Too good to be true, and all that. But it's a wonderful story so far, I think. Extraordinary.
Five well-deserved stars.
Just gets better and better.......
That I have to agree with the other comment that something has to happen. Just don't mess things up too badly and keep us with a happy ending.
I'm definitely in agreement with Theognis that this chapter is the proverbial calm before the storm. I'm on the edge of my seat... James has too much history in the town, and the town has too much at stake to let him go. Now that people have seen him with Bethany--and the same goes for John with Eliza--I doubt everyone will let him just pull his business (money) out from the town and go on his merry way. I'm biting my nails in anticipation. Excellent job--as usual!
I must say that I am enjoying this story immensely. Your style is just amazing and so very erotic and sensual, while having just the right amount of grittiness to make it so very, very hot and steamy. I truly hope that you will continue this tale for several chapters and that both couples remain happy, although I can see in your writing style that you write "in the real" and don't really conform to that fairy tale, happily-ever-after-type of story line, which is good and appreciated. But I still hope that the sisters will remain happy. I know whatever way you take the story, it will be well written and well received. I (we, meaning all your fans) can't wait for more! Keep up the excellent work.
perfect life there is sometimes an event that jerks you back to reality and humbles you. As you write this story so reality perfect, I am awaiting that event, and I know that it will happen. I also know you will write it well. I am well aquainted with being humbled by certain catastrophic events.
I would love to follow this story into Hawaii.
I was away for a week. Found the new chapters and this was the 1st thing I read. As you've set up the story, there is so much potential for future chapters. I'm waiting eagerly to see where you take us.
This story is written with so much love. and i am right there reading between the lines. wishing so much that it just go's on and on.
my heart go's out the you. i can feel your heart beating hard . want even more then every to bring both men and both women#
to gether . brilliant out standing story. i can see myself want more.
and more. the story is secong to none. the writing most exciting and excellent. i true born writer you are.
I discover this story by change, outstanding writing. You are a gifted writer, better then Marie Rochelle and other writers of interracial romance. Amazing characters and storyline. Please keep on writing.
Wow... now both sisters have love in their lives!
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