All Comments on 'Stuff'

.....life of comedians. Nicely done.

Line 5 - first verse could end with "rat's ass" - the "about" is redundent, perhaps an oversight.

Love the final lines of verse 1.

Tess + 5

in this poem and it paints a rather disturbing picture of some kind of world weariness, but the main thing is that that moves me as a reader and that is good. I assume you mean Catskills by Jewish Alps and not sure why you'd want a metaphor for it. To show it's the top tier of playing for Jews? Catskills is such a rich, image laden word for me but that's my perspective. Improv is a good metaphor in this piece, too. It's used to great effect.

And I am not sure why. I normally loved your stuff but I kept getting the feeling I was being cut off half way through thoughts. This might just be me though.

ha, ha, ha, I'm dyin' ya know

what kind of shit did I get into?

I would can the Jewish Alps,

to far gone for ref.

BTW 159

more my loss than yours

When I researched the Catskill resorts for the poem, a Wikipedia article indicated that many comics who appeared there facetiously called them the "Jewish Alps." While I don't know Carlin ever used the term, he grew up in the Bronx section of New York City not far from the Catskills, and he certainly was facetious.

My apologies if anyone was offended by the term. That wasn't my intention. With the benefit of feedback and hindsight, I would have chosen a different term or location.