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Dancing in Silhouette

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by butters03/26/11

i hope you don't mind my thoughts on this, raven

but it seems to me you could lose so much and still keep the heart of this. if you kept the first line of each strophe, and the last, you have 8 lines that (imo) imply pretty much all the rest your poem says inbetween. in fact, if you cut even further to the first line of each and the final line ... just food for thought. :)

You see the leap, but not the landing.
You see me turn and think I'm graceful.
You see me glide across the stage.

Look at the pretty costume, the bright lights.
I'm only dancing in silhouette.

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by darkangel00108/11/11

Beautiful

Sensual, impressionistic... A lovely poem.

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