by RejectReality
Hot story with just the right amount of spice. I reject your name, because this seems very real to me. Keep writing! I like your reality.
enjoyed it.when someone cheats you once its his fault but when he cheats you twice its your fault. Good that she came to know of his cheating well in time before he could have done more harm.
Nice humour and satire.But storyline is common, girl finds out the boy is cheating on her, boy calls her a w *****. .No boy who's been caught cheating would praise the girl or apologise. He will always try to harm her more.Normal story.
Five stars for you.Partners who cheat never loved so they don't really care what happens to the other partner.They would try to show that the other partner was at fault just to blame others & save their face. Thats called you have your cake and eat it too. Lolz. Humor fits in perfectly.
u & ur characters str8 put it down! I especially liked some of the unique ways u described their coupling! 2 b honest, I didn't like her-4 lack of a better term-"ghetto" way of speach(seemed kinda stereotypical)but 2 b even more honest, a lot of us do talk that way ;o) 5 STARS BABY!!!!!
Being a black woman married 2 a white man, I am truly addicted 2 these types of interracial stories. It can b quite difficult@times 4 women in my situation 2 find erotic stories we can relate 2. THANX 4 GIVING ME MY FIX!! ;o)
Took me to that warm fuzzy (unless waxed) place. More please
I loved reading your story because it's so real life. Not just fucking in and out... gone. You have the story where as if you chose to you can continue another chapter for Grace and Shane. Now that I would love to read. I hope you keep writing about bw/wm as your other reader wrote I also would love to see more of the stories I love.
Thanks for the comments, everyone!
I never set out to write sequels, but I always leave an opening of some sort. It all depends upon whether the characters have a story to tell me.
Grace may seem a little stereotypical, but I just thought of her as someone who doesn't deny where she comes from. That's the way everyone she knew talked as she grew up, and she doesn't try to change it. The management must have overlooked it to see her potential, because she's in a critical position as an operator in the warehouse, after all ~_^
Of course, I may not have stressed that enough in the story =P
I like her. She's got flavor. That's what made her interesting to me -- and Shane -- who I envisioned as about as vanilla as vanilla gets until she opened his eyes.
But if what happened with shane was my reality I would not reject it...
Job well done!
I enjoyed this submission! Written just how I like to do things and have them done... Great job! Thank you.
Call me a softy, but I enjoy a story that ends on an upswing. The sex was great, but a good story is more than just the mechanics of the fuck. Please do continue with this story!
This was a really great story, and it left me wanting more. You are a talented writer. Thanks for your time and effort.
I would love to read more about these characters. Very hot story! Keep writting please.
Please continue this one, man. Outstanding storyline, and has a lot of potential, especially for Jaymal to get pissed off, come looking for revenge, and then get completely messed up! Ah, the possibilities. :)
Thanks for another very hot read. I don't want to be mistaken for a racial Chauvinist but I liked the counter punch of a white guy with a big cock who makes a woman feel like a woman without calling her dirty names or degrading her.
Thanks again.
Bluejacket01 OUT.
ANOTHER story of yours that could be easily expanded. You HAVE the talent.....can't see why you never seem to get beyond one or two(at most) chapters.
You write GOOD stories BUT you could write GREAT stories IF you would expand them to their full potential.
The sex was great but I almost stopped reading at the 1st page because of Grace's speech. A person can be comfortable with their roots and still have enough sense to know how to speak in public or even decent grammar. The story would have been hotter if Grace hadn't been dumbed down so thoroughly.
I agree with firediamond. The story was great, as were the details, however Grace's way if speaking was a bit off a turn off and I couldn't really get into it. As a Black woman, I kind of understand why you wrote the story that way, however it's kind of hard to get into a sexual story when one of the character's speech seems so.... "Unsensual"
Two giving lovers find each other, after or while getting rid of user losers.
Excellent!
I like this story and would love to see it grow. There is definitely a romance brewing.
Black girls say Dick instead of cock. Other than that, this is a fairly decent Black vernacular and a good story.
Loved the story it was great, the like rating button isn’t working, but I gave you my highest rating
What I like most about the story is two good people who deserve better than what they had get together and discover their compatibility, And then they find there's more there than his cock and her twat. I have hopes they will create a long-term relationship.