All Comments on 'The Tease Down the Street Ch. 01'

I would love to see where their relatioship goes from here.

The story is developing very well but it has too many grammatical mistakes and spelling problems that distract from the narrative.

loved it looking forward to more .

I think you could have just said she was on the pill because of a female reason. This could be a love story going forward. As a romantic it would be nice for them to have their own children since both were from families that only had a single child.

Well honestly a great story but as to the not able to get pregnant.... I have heard a lot of girls that thought similar... and without protection they are often called mothers lol

dude keep it at a longer length it's really a great read grammatical errors be damned i would love to see where this relationship goes

Great story. Not too long, and well balanced. Strange about the grammar errors comment as there are not many and most stories on here are far worse. Well done.

The length of the story and the progression were perfect. Can't wait for more, just like this one!!

Great story, I enjoyed reading it.

I knew a girl that said she couldn't get pregnant who is the proud mother of three.

If this is your first story you will be a fantastic writer! Keep up the great work!

Perfection, without question among the best on this site. Shorter doesn't mean better so put that out of your mind and let it happen as it will.

Nicely done! Looking forward to more. reminds me of my own awkward teenage years

I loved it!!!! Except for the grammatical errors, the story was fantastic.

Good Story, no don't make them any shorter. Character development and build up makes it much more realistic.... much better this way, rather than doing the meet, kiss, jump in bed scene. Can relate to the teen issues, teasing, etc. etc.

please continue i enjoyed the read

Thank you all for your kind words... I deeply appreciate it. There is another chapter on its way! I will attempt to keep the grammar errors and clumsiness to a minimum. Looking into an editor as I write this

A very good story; I hope you keep writing. Perhaps it might have moved a bit fast at the end. Rich and Stephanie went from first kiss to first time all in a few minutes. This could have been stretched out over several chapters during the upcoming school break. (not brake ;-) )

Watch out for homonyms here are some homonym errors I noticed.

where / wear

you're / your

brake / break

preoccupied / per-occupied

Here is a link that may help.

http://www.fun-with-words.com/nym_homonyms.html

You can find the meaning of almost any word simply be searching for the word in Google.

"I've decided that there will be more to come with this story."

Really? Doesn't seem like it...

really good work! yea it has some mistakes, but nothing that can't be corrected in future stories. don't apoligize for the length, if the story is good people WILL read it! sure there are always some to gripe (can't please everyone!), but go with it. looking forward for more of your work even if you decide not to continue this one.

Great story and honest to boot. Not too long as the build up in the relationship made it all worthwhile. I can not stand the wam bam thank you mam stories or the overdone oral sex. They are phony and not real which spoils a great read.

Just a hint before posting a story leave it for a day or two and then proof read it.

I am looking forward to more stories like this.

I saw Chapter 2 was up, & decided to start by reading Chapter 1. Doing that, I couldn't even finish Page 1!!!! FAR too many mistakes!!

Too many grammatical mistakes to give it a 5 but it would merit one if cleaned up. Most of the errors are very simple ones, but distracting nonetheless.

I didn't have an editor back when I did this. I will see if I can talk the lovely AMA into editing this and then I will repost the story. Perhaps it will be more bearable then.

The quick prego part at the end seemed kind of like an afterthought but other than that it was fucking great!

Otherwise, pretty hot.

5 star

You apologized if some found the story too lengthy, however I found it just right. The flirting and teasing build-up to the sex was delightful. Looking forward to more of their story.

You had me hanging on every word at the end! It really was a beautiful story with a great climax at the end. I also could feel her body myself as you slowly revealed her. I'm sure I will like part II as well.

There could have been more teasing once the actual touching started. More looking/seeing with first time wonder. More "Do you like them?", Do you like it when I .....? , Do you like this or that better?, What would you like to do? What would you like me to do?, etc.

Gave it 4 stars.