by EmmyLou93
Well written with a nicely flowing story line. Can't wait for the next chapter.
The story line is wonderful, flowing and beautiful. Please continue this story, its a beautiful beginning but only the beginning.
I don't give away compliments; they must be earned. This story was well written, sensitive, and it left the reader wanting more. You earned these compliments; good job!
While I agree that your story was beautifully written and arousing, it was just a tease that's why it only got three stars.
WOW, disabled hands hard to type disabled hands, but had to say good job and well done ty, more pls/ bill
Nicely written, hot little fantasy. Jack's entry is quite abrupt and that took me out a bit but really nice otherwise.
Thanks
I like time setting you used and to good effect. Unique among the stories ive read on this site. The arousal is palpable and i really like the story line. :)
Such a wonderful beginning to your tale . . .
a perfect setting and your writing is so well done. I was immersed in the scene and engrossed in such a perfect innocent moment. Well done! Can't wait to read more.
Benjamin