All Comments on 'Bess'

Its a good start but it seems you rushed it out before it was ready to be shown.

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No condemnation from me, just a question of style. This rushes a bit. Also, how is this Mature? She is just slightly older than Bess.

I would ask for the primary character to be flushed out a bit more, especially if the reader did not read all of Daughter's Best Friend.

This doesn't belong in 'mature', It was so rushed towards the end I think you gave up on the chapter, when clearly this is a continuing storyline, Bess made her decision too quick.

I would like to read more of this story line

I disagree with the author on the necessity of reading the prequel first. Bess' character is developed at length in His Daughter's Best Friend. As a continuation, this story is good, plausible, and interesting. As a standalone, not so much. Since the author slyly references it, imagine reading Fifty Shades Darker without reading Fifty Shades of Grey first.