by abbo27
... to get a real idea of a story from a short first chapter, but this one has a lot going for it and I am really looking forward to subsequent chapters, in which you will develop your already fascinating characters even more.
Thank you for writing for us and sharing a great talent with us - five stars.
Your writing is good. The very common theme of the working man/rich bitch comeuppance will need special treatment lest it become "just another #Occupier" story. One suggestion would be to emphasize the action since you've chosen fairly stock characters. Please feel free to make me change my opinion.
This is an excellent start. Stories can take a while to develop, this one got a running start!
lovely beginning to a typical forced fuck story sounds deleishous