great, lovely - and hard to stomch. Thank you very much!
Wow - This takes graphic to a whole new level.
The choice of like 'claw' and 'mauling' is what makes this unusual and powerful.
I like the use of water in the beginning and end too. The title is also an interesting choice.
Two silver manes
regard a babbling brook.
She reaches into his lap,
with an arthritic liver-spotted claw,
ended well too
whether to reminesce or re live a past time. TK U MLJ LV NV
Except for this thing I have about the word "cunt," except perhaps where there's anger or catharsis, this is one of your best.
Click here to leave your own comment on this submission!
orBack to In the Adirondack Clouds
orMore submissions by oneiria.
Edit comment orSubmit Comment
Comment posted successfully - click here to view it or write another.
Title of your comment:
Your public comment about In the Adirondack Clouds:
Please type in the security codeYou may also listen to a recording of the characters.
Title your feedback:
Your feedback to oneiria:
If you would like a response, enter your email address in this box:
Feedback sent successfully - click here to write another.
Login or Sign Up
All contents © Copyright 1998-2012. Literotica is a trademark. No part may be reproduced in any form without explicit written permission.
Terms Of Services|Report A Problem|Privacy
Password:Forgot your password?
Your current user avatar, all sizes:
You have a new user avatar waiting for moderation.
Select new user avatar:
Upload and save
User avatar uploaded successfuly and waiting for moderation.