This was one of the best, most picturesque fantasies I have read in a long while. I give it 5 stars and have to say, thank you.
It was wild and beautiful; a love story I want very deeply. Not the age or even the kinks, just the beauty of the moment; the romance of something I do not think many people ever experience, or authors are able to ever capture.
I would suggest future readers read this with a Pandora station seeded with Iron & Wine.
a beautiful tale, beautifully written. Thank you.
How beautiful, how sensual. The way that everyone should lose their virginity; with real passion and true understanding......5 stars because they don't have 10
The age gap didn't seem to have any significant meaning to them and they let their bodies tell them what was needed to be done.
As I was reading, I was hoping that they had a long loving relationship where they both explored their fantasies and how they wanted to be loved. Not wasting any heart beats.
Thanks for the very well written story
Older women with young men is excellent for fun and satisfaction. Young men need direction but they are willing to do anything. More should try it.
I can´t agree more on the other comments!
I have rarely read a story which was so romantic and loving.
The tension between the characters and the really out- outstanding beach scene with her behind him.
All those words she whispers in his ear.
Shocking beautiful !!!
More stories of this kind, please ... you´re a genius!
Thanks for sharing!
The other comments state it all - but I would further distill the essence as great sensitivity and integrity in the narration. Exquisite writing!
This is a story of such power, and yet such delicacy, interwoven with skilled experience. I've read several of your stories before, and I've been astounded by every single one, because you somehow manage to take my breath away with the heat and the tenderness you describe. Like a great pianist it's not just about getting the notes right, but oh, a virtuoso performance is moving, through every gamut of the emotions. Pianist and audience are both lost in the music itself. So too with your stories. I look forward with delicious anticipation to every one you publish, knowing that it will carry me into the heat and exquisite sensitivity of erotica. Thank you.
If you can translate your imagination into a real relationship, with the same honesty and intensity, you will never be alone.
Thanks for sharing.
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