Written reasonably well, but still a cuckolding story and hence a "1."
A close week at Fantasy...better late than never.
Too short and not character development. Three times as long would have helped.
This isn't romance. If they have "fallen in love" then they need to get a divorce and be together. Not screw around and then "have my baby" crap. And with little character development I, as a reader, can't see either character as anything but selfish.
It's very brevity, urgency and lack of character 'build' is a virtue. They're there. They can. They want to. They do. Simple. Life can be simple, y'know....Thanks!
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