by Just Plain Bob
So the US Army trains psychopaths to drug and arrange multiple rapes of women? And at the end they like it? You should be totally ashamed of yourself for posting this rebarbative rubbish. You've trashed your reputation.
with horrible brutality leaves on open for payback in kind. TK U MLJ LV NV
...wimps and cuckolds. You have chosen to go polar opposite on this story and the commenters are still not happy.
HMMMmmmmm?
How can you offend so many people? Just luck I guess!
The story was written well, no real issues with grammer or other issues. The real problem is that JPB has broken the mold and did not make him a cuck.
Keep trying different ideas. Maybe you will find something to make everyone happy, or not.
You are one of a dozen or so authors I always click on. Keep writing your stories your way. You will get complaints no matter what you do.
Just because of the previous negative comments, I felt like I should specifically mention here that I gave you five stars. All the readers: This is fantasy you people, get over it. True, its not exactly my cup of tea either. But I think that the story has a psychological aspect to it, and you have made a very good job of portraying the feelings of your main character. Well written.
This one crosses several lines. Still, thanks for the effort.
It all ended abruptly, raw and without closure. The story seems complete in the respect of the kids revenge but open ended for continuance and/ or background and/ or Yolanda's story. A sequel maybe? I liked it even as it is.
I usually don't read NC, but read this only because you wrote it.
Please don't pay attention to idiots that can't or won't separate fantasy from reality. Plausible.
Thanks for the effort.
Piano, dancing lessons, and no car? That deserves a gang bang?
She wouldn't have been able to control shit when he left for college and it's really partly his fault he just accepted her at home and didn't make his dad choose.
I love a good revenge story, but in this case the guy came off sounding like a spoiled bitch who didn't get his way and needed to feel powerful by drugging and raping a grieving widow. Yeah, that'll show her who's boss...
This dipshit comes across like some of the assholes I knew in high school who thought the world revolved around them and what they wanted - a jerk with the emotional stability of a three-year old in a full-size body. She should have him tossed in the slammer and let him discover the joys of forcible rape.
To have some one rape let alone gang rape is inhuman. It is a life time of torture. For what a strict..... step mom? Well let see what happens when there is an uncaring parent. Child grow up drug, welfare, std, jobless.
Well there is more but jpb left me hanging....... i let him hang
However, it may just be me but I think Bob's story needed and ending... can't say that I have the ability to write it but I feel two or more chapters are needed as there are so many possibilities to this tale... I hope Bob adds further pats/chapters to it.... so many lose ends.... possibilities. I understand that 'suspense' is a good ploy and makes the reader think about the story and want to 'finish' the story themselves in their head... but Bob could do it better and, thus, let us know how he would finish it..... Thanks for a good read, Bob. Loved it thus far.
Is she going to start fucking him regular now or is she going to pretend to come on to him, drug him, and then have HIM gang-raped?
Whatever she did was done out of love. It might not have been healthy love back then & is certainly less then that now. Regardless, he's paid her back 10 fold for whatever transgressions on her part. They need each other but communication should come first. Ask each other for forgiveness.
There is a bond between them that extends to the grave, no matter what. There is serious sickness there but with diligence they could complete each other.
I did it once before and I remember some that you left unfinished (IMO) or stories where there was no revenge obtained, male or female. Also I don't like multiple choice on the endings although (when I read the 2nd or 3rd) some of the alternates I like. I often don't bother reading any of them because I am old and set in my ways. You are a very good and entertaining writer and I am running out of "revenge" stories that I have not read and so many of them are crap. Thank you for your efforts and I will not make negative comments even if you leave me boiling, LOL.
Because if it was, it would also be the last!
how pathetic can a so called author get. the bitch deserved just punishment. ur sorbid mind don't get it. the last tale of urs I'll read.
1 star
1star
This is way, way, below your standards JPB. I've noticed this decline the last couple of years.Has JPB dropped away, or even died, and someone is posing as him? What a bitch Yolanda was. Made her stepson learn how to dance and play a musical instrument. Skills that certainly make it easier to meet women. Made him keep his grades up. What a bitch!
Yeah, she crossed the line, by denying him a chance to participate in sports, and picking his college. He was right to break off relations. In any event what he did to Yolanda was way beyond what she deserved. Severing all contact would have been sufficient.
First time I ever ate 3 squares a day. Almost went to Leavenworth Prisonin while in basic training, THeY TeLL You WHaT To Do, for your own good and others. Putting your character in the ARMY does not fit your story at all. Sorry, still a good one...
I was was honorably discharged, Bill
the only emotion that moved me was the hate in juniors eyes and what he had done. whether she was sexy or not, she was and is his step mother. it was a story, I know, but that doesn't excuse the perpetrator from what he did to his mother. definitely a sick person. she may have been strict, but some are, just like some dads are strict. what he did should haunt him for the rest of his life.
She sounded like a good stepmother, one that actually cared.
Taught him things a scholar that could head to a professional career should know.
Taught him discipline, all to lacking in teenagers today, and worse "gasp" wanted him to learn things girls would like in a guy.
So, he has her gang raped and did so himself. All while she was insisting he get the money and things his father left him. She wasnt trying to steal them.
What I guess made this story bad wasnt the writing, it was the main character.
The guy deserves to spend a good long time in prison.
As a fantasy it is an excellent story, though it is certainly not a morality play. For me she sounded like a control freak and he took control of her...
A lot of negativity toward him.
Why does she get a pass?
She kept him from:
Playing sports.
Having a job.
Having a father, since he abdicated the position after marrying her.
She also did her best to make him a social outcast in school.
Is such a wonder that he grew up twisted and hateful?
But then she herself seems a hateful twisted person.
... it's been a few years, but I wish you would finish this story - in your own inimitable way. :-) Mike.
This was so bad and incomplete that I've come up with several endings. In all of them Yolanda triumphs and the nameless piece of shit dies in agony. I thought maybe he could live a long miserable life unable to move without pain after all his joints had been crushed; but decided that would be a burden to society, so he really has to die. So thanks JPB, you really got my creative juices flowing. Maybe when I retire I'll have time to write a few.
This story pointed to the viewpoint of a developing immature juvenile. Although, logical, the story lacked perspective from Yolanda and the father. Extremely well choreographed revenge no matter how misguided.
Only 3 stars for an unfinished story!
"She means well, you just need to meet her halfway." – Halfway? It’s 100% Yolanda’s way!
“The house was in her name and in her will she left it to you.” – If the house was left to him, maybe there wasn’t anything he could do while he was a minor, but once he turned 18 couldn’t he have thrown HER out unless she showed him some respect?
Loved the golden shower!
excellent story!!! So eat it annony!!! Fuck!! Bonnie is right you are a super asshole.
How dare she! How dare she be a good stepmother! How dare she try to prevent her stepson from associating with drug users and rapists! How dare she want him to get a good education and want a positive future for him! How dare she try to give him the tools to find a good job! How dare she love his father, and want whats best for him! How dare she try to give him his inheritance uncontested!
Truly, she was the most evil woman to have ever lived!
But at least our BRAVE hero soldier stood up such evil, and had an innocent woman gang raped repeatedly by dozens of rapists! That'll show her and her morals! That'll teach her that being a good person isn't something that should be taken lying down! Another glorious victory for might is right!!
Or you didn't pick up too clearly what he said perhaps?
I think its more likely that he said, "Son, you are a over privileged, ungrateful little cunt!"
Poor Yolanda, I wonder what your thoughts would have been if your step mum had of walked in and sat on her arse, did fuck all and showed you no guidance like your father did?
Yolanda is to be commended, especially as a non blood relative, for the amount of energy, interest, concern and dedication she has shown towards you. I'm positive your natural mother would most certainly have approved.
Therefore, the only evil bastard in all of this can only be youself, no?
Jesus Christ, JPB, you are the most cynical bastard on the planet. Have you ever written a story about a woman that wasn’t actually a brain dead slut? The people you have written about in your 10, 000 stories have the collective IQ, all 30,000 of them, of a brussel sprout.
Have you ever met a woman who wasn’t a slut or a man who wasn’t an asshole? Believe it or not, there are 10 or 12 of them out there. The mindless repetition of “Harder, fuck me harder,” rings in my ears. The “it was just sex, it hasn’t hurt you a bit,” the “I love you, you know I do and I know you love me,” the “He just has something I need, ten inches,” the fuck my ass now,” the “fuck over me,” endlessly and mindlessly repeated, a thousand times.
Your universe is in the hands of a cold and demonic God. I pity you, JPB. Someday, I hope you actually meet someone that isn’t a complete and total asshole. But you won’t recognize them, because that is what you are. Your universe mirrors your soul. May God have mercy on you.
I don't know. It was ok, but not vengeance. She got the fucking of a lifetime, and loved it. That's not vengeance.
Most women in my time are sluts, or bitches, because they married for looks, cock, money, situation, their biological clock was ticking, seldom if ever love. They are taught as babies to say I love you daddy, or I love you mommy, or give uncle Henry a kiss honey and a hug. They don't even know what the words mean yet, but are told to say them, and do things, to the point that they don't mean anything, other than a tool to get what they want. Look at the divorce rate for sake. Then when interviewed, oh I want a nice guy, but then marry the bad boy, does this sound familiar?
Anon can kiss my ass. This world has some fucked up women in it. Well, fucked up guys too, but that's not the subject is it.
dude!! their are way better ways to get even with such a sexy enemy!! ;) unmanly!! and that too when Yolanda is so honest about what he gets through his dad's will !!
if she didnt inform her stepson, a maximum time of non claim from him would have resulted in his losing a meaty inheritance!! ...right now he hardly has a life....only struggle and a meagre income!! ....so unmanly of step son...to say the least!! ;)
sick asshole
revenge by rape how manly hope you go to jkail and rot there
Nice to consider, but,,,,well, you were willing to do the time for doing the crime so it is what it is.
I wish my camcorder battery would last that long. Double pussy penetration is the beast. Revenge is a bitch.
I would willingly lie in court to put that piece of shit in prison for a few decades
Is something you might want to look up. Seems drugging, alcohol counts too, someone with the intent of having illicit sex with them does constitute the felony crime of rape. Then your hero is stupid enough to video tape it all, every day your see on the news or read somewhere about morons who record their crimes. I'm surprised your moron didn't post it on the net like so many do. It would make really easy to convict all of their dumb asses, as soon as the jury saw it it would be obvious what was happening. That many idiots involved you know someone is going to get stoned and start talking and then the cat is out of the bag and badges start knocking on doors. But then again it's just a story on Lit in the NC genre. Also, Ketamine Hydrochloride (Special K) does exist as a date rape drug, but it is only legitimately available by prescription and is used as an anesthetic. It's also extremely dangerous with used with alcohol or other drugs. Signed: BTW
Why read a story in the NONCONSENT - that means rape- genre if you think its so wrong to fantasize about?
How much would it take for 1 of the 27 to fold and get everyone in Trouble? He would get 10 years at least and that's too good for him. Typical chicken-shit kid who won't take up for himself and grows up hating women. Chicken shit like his old man.
No other word for it. This moron is a creep of the worst kind. I know it's only a story, but this is for anyone in the world who would do this to a woman: I hope something worse happens to every one of you who would perpetrate such an indignity on a fellow human being.
Where is the end, to many of the stories that are written by this author just abruptly end, why no conclusion. The stories are all well written, in the end they just stop. Disappointing as author is a good writer.
Bob, I know you’ve written some great stories, but this was terrible, no woman would deserved to be raped like that, whether her step son hated her or not. Rape is not an entertaining story. KS
Rape has never been something I enjoy reading. This story was certainly not up to your usual standards.
Very poor for a JPB story.
No end, no real satisfaction.
Hell, he should at least kicked her out of his house.
Bill S.
I've never been a real big fan of rape stories and that's exactly what this was .
And? Sympathy for kids with overbearing parents, bio or step. Gang rape was wrong. just piss on while she is sound asleep, several times if needed
Just read "Bob, Molly and Marie". No comments or scoring possible. And for good reason. What the fuck happened to JPB? The Bob character in this story starts out as the typical JPB guy but turns into a spineless freaking wimp at the end. Completely turned my stomach.
Had some woman pissed you off the day you wrote this.The word sadistic springs to mind.Sorry dude,earned yourself a do-nut hole on this one.
The MC in this story is a whiny little bitch, for starters and would wash out of even the softest boot camp within a couple days. You snowflakes don't know what "real" abuse either mental or physical is, and all your participation trophies make me sick. You don't have even the tiniest amount of courage, honor, valor, or self-respect - NO self-entitlement is not the same. Then to hammer home the level of depravity the MC drugs and rapes his own stepmother and just to show how much of a homo he is her backdoor is what he covets most, well he will get plenty of anal in prison for what should be a life sentence his disgusting degenerate butt deserves.
Anybody that would feed a woman a date rape drug needs his balls cut off and crazy glued to his forehead . I don’t give a shit how mean she was to you when you were a kid . I had some real beauties in my family that were miserable bitches but I would NEVER do that . I am NOT impressed .
You have a serious problem if you think that this kind of story is going to get five stars .