by CamillaHumby
jeez. That made me shiver and tear up. That's a poem to love, if ever there was one.
Tribute to a happy and wonderful life. We should all be so lucky.
What a great flash story. Look forward to your next offering. Thanks for reminding us what true life/love is all about
This could easily have (also, NOT a quibble) been submitted as Erotic Poetry. VERY nice, and hot!
Nice trick. Very nice in fact.
Nicely Done and Thanks...My sweetie and I really liked this...many parallels to our own life...I swear it gave me goosebumps and that other thing also!...Sweetie liked it a LOT>and of course so did I. !!! :-)
so sad when a long time, loving mate passes. only the memories are left. i have seen it too often over the last 10 years. one day soon it will be me or my mate that only has the memories of a lilfe time.THANK YOU
I imagine as the author wrote this she had troubles with boundaries for her characters and a couple of times it almost got away. What almost got away wss the strong undercureent of selfless love between the two. Thankfully it didn't.
After many years of sitting in the weeds on this web site, this story motivated me to finally register. This is one of top five stories I have read in all those years. I don't know what more I could say.
Romantic and erotic. I like the conditions on the book. A truly loving wife. Five stars!
Not a word wasted, not a word out of place. The sheer simplicity of it made it perfect - a wonderful declaration of what true love can, and should, be. Congratulations on the best posting I've read on here for a very, very long time.
Glad to see that there is true feelings to a story. I love a great sex story but a story with some emotion is great. Well done.
Thanks for this wonderful little poetic tale. You said so much with so little...beautifully.
I only wish I could give you more. Simply done and very touching; I loved it. More like this...please!
Read it twice. Both times I wanted to go back and read it yet again. Damn good read and well worth a five.
I have tears, not for the sadness, but for the fullness and sweetness. Thank you so much.
A great true loving wives, but the best part is, no Navy Seals were cuckolded or mentioned. A normal man and his woman. Ahhhhh!
Show them that book. Think of all the love that was bound up in taking them and both of you sharing them through the years. And it may help them, if they read your stories, to understand his prostituting you for his business.
Sweet but sad.
Gave me a lump in my throat and tears in my eyes, knowing that all of us are going to lose our loved ones eventually.
Thanks for the good read.
When I first opened this story file, I quickly gave up on it. Not much of a real story, I thought to myself. So I closed the file.
But within 15 minutes I came back to give it another look. Yes, it wasn't like a real story.
But that's what made it so special. It lovingly summed up a long term marriage with just one-line comments & filling up only one page of paper.
After reading it twice, I started to think about my own marriage of 47 years & wondering what I would like to write about.
Jeff Jones
Unconventional for lit., that's for sure. Way past the bar room story telling style we mostly get here. She loves her man, that strongly comes through.
And I loved it again for the umpteenth time. Thank you for writing it, and hen sharing it!
I have lived this and I am LIVING this now.... I see her in my mind, I feel her in my body, I know she lives in my heart, I will love her forever and ever and ever
Your details and teasing is what love between a wife and husband should always strive for. Thanks for sharing it
CH, you have written the essence of a lifetime of love,
I am now going to go through the photos and memorabilia
of the twenty-five years I had with my wife.
My memories of her are what sustain me now in my declining years.
A love prose-poem. Beautifully done, even got the meter right.
You could have this on your phone, and show it to new acquaintances. Anyone worth knowing would love it; steer clear of the rest.
"Then he put it in me. I came." That's funny. If only women were that simple. Maybe I suck as a lover, but I think that is exceedingly rare.
If only such a love existed anymore. What a beautiful, wonderful world this would be.
Simple, subtle, but very loving. Excellent work full of deep love.
This was a wonderful example of a pair that was meant for one another. They were two people working together to keep their relationship alive, interesting, romantic, and sexy, the way married people should. The way the MC teased him and her thought process while she did so was gorgeous. The only thing that marred it was the sad ending due to his early passing. Regardless, really well done.
I just stumbled across this and I'm so glad I did. What a wonderful, sweet story.
Wow.
You just wrote the dream so many of us have.
I hope that story isn't all fantasy for you. I hope you have that life in the making.
Well ...
In a flash story there's a lot unsaid.
Maybe in there were the things I didn't see.
In this short story I saw quite a few things he did for her.
Only one thing she did for him.
And it had quite a few conditions.
It makes me wonder how much she loved him.
Or if she just loved that he loved her.
3 out of 5 from me.
I loved it. It came close to describing what our relationship is like.
I have an album of photos of her of all degrees of intimacy she sent me when we were separated due to covid. I would look at them on many nights before going to sleep. I would also read her letters some of which were her fantasies of what she would like us to do together. She is a real life loving wife. I am a British man aged 83 and she is mainland Chinese aged 60. How we met and fell in love despite the huge differences in age, culture and life experience is a miracle. At my age I recognise that our time together will be very limited and I will have to leave her, but we are determined to make the most of every day we have together. After 4 long term relationships, 2 ended by death and 2 by divorce I can truly say she is the best thing that has ever happened to me.
Yes... a true Loving Wife...
...but this 5-star prose could have been in Poetry instead.
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But then, I would probably have missed it, which would have been my loss.