For the read.
I gave you three stars for quality writing but this chapter was so preposterous it doesn't even work in fiction.
Another commenter on another story mentioned that wives with submissive personalities were a total nightmare if not managed and that was while knowing they were submissive. If you didn't know, oh boy!
Jack's old man and his mum should have been destroyed for that level of betrayal. Normally it's the grandparents protecting the cheater so as not to be removed from the grandkid's lives (or instigating to create the grandkids). Nice twist on a common theme.
I enjoyed reading your story. It was well worth the wait.
Very anti-climatic. Thanks for the offering.
Mat it left me flat. Sorry to have to say that.
I think that flat describes this chapter perfectly. What was the point? Everyone lives happily ever after when the cheating slut submissive wife is healed? Sorry, it doesn't compute.
It was a waste of time.
It wrapped up the first chapter....
Contrary to some others, I liked it.
The point of counseling (or therapy) is the betterment of the counselee. If improvement, correction, redemption and repair are not good things why do we have schools, coaches, books or anything or person to help people overcome their mistakes? This was a fine story...a "5" without question.
But just for fun and penance Wendy should've become their bisexual sex concubine.... Just for shits & giggles.
I agree that it did not hurt the first chapter, and it provided the reasons for the infidelity. Surprisingly enough, I thought it a good story. One always has to accept the fact that in these cheating wife stories the wife always loves the husband madly but still does things that will hurt him for selfish reasons and then tries to hide them. The premise is of course stupid, because when one loves someone they will not risk losing them with affairs. However, there seems to be a formula in most of these stories that requires this, otherwise we would have boring stories of cheating wives doing what they do because they no longer care about their husbands feelings wouldn't we? Then all the wails, tears, shock, grieving, and anger, would be rather boring because the husband could get very little emotional revenge by dumping the uncaring bitch... Everyone would have to maim or kill the bitch and her lover/s for any kind of meaningful revenge! Some of us just wait long enough to get over the stages of grief and shock and quit caring...which is the real opposite of love. Then we move on and find someone else to give us the love we seek. I really do think that love/despair and hate/revenge are the two sides of the same coin. The stories about moving on and finding another seem far more sensible to me. That's why StangStar Papatoad and WinterFrog appeal to me I guess. Yet, this is what happens here in the first part as well. He just moved on with Sarah...
A 'UK' writer who uses 'snuck' instead of sneaked? I don't think so. And a Brit who actually believes that 'therapy' has some value? Fairytale stuff.
An intelligent writer to know when to stop, in your case it should have been after ch01 as you had a complete story there which you have managed to destroy here in this chapter, mores the pity.
Not my favorite style but appreciated. 4*
The first chapter was much better, both in premice and flow. The second chapter seems a bit awkward and doesn't flow smoothly. It is kind of difficult to follow. I liked it and hope this writer keeps trying.
On another front snuck beats the crap out of sneaked and drug and dragged', who cares. My guess is the dragged and therapy commenter uses loo instead of shitter.
Keep writing and you will improve.
The Father is jealous of his son? Why? And his Mother supported the Father and felt they had done nothing wrong? I thought the son was happy in the IT position and didn't care to run the business? And how would either of them EVER accept Wendy as a Godparent? What kind of example would she be setting for the children? And the therapist suddenly loves the slut Wendy and wants to ruin his career? Once again, I am baffled by the outcome.
Should have been a one chapter story, THIS was NOT needed and did not answer the majority of the unanswered questions from chapter 1. And stop with all the exclamation marks, they're just not needed.
She's still a cheating slut. The Father and the Mother have to go on the list as the worst parents ever. Gran is my favorite. And why did you write this?
I guess I am a little vindictive. I think a part 02 would be ok if the story was about Wendy turning into a street whore in London, getting hook on drugs then dieing in some gutter. Or possibly marrying Steve and he turns out to be abusive asshole who then turns her out on the street to earn money for him. You know something nice for her. You know a nice happy ending for her. Of course this is a story not real life.
Gee, a whole chapter of shlocky 'happy endings!'. I am ashamed that I didn't figure out, one-quarter of the way in, that such was the case ... so I could skip the rest.
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