All Comments on 'The Writer's Ferris Wheel'

Found I had commented on nearly all of them. Great vocabulary hammering the point home. 5ed

i abolish strunk and white.

style takes a bit to get used too

can offer no pros or cons, sorry

interesting enough to look for your name. hope that helps.

5

your facility with words is clear and you are comfortable enough with them to be playful, establish a strong voice, all good stuff.

I don't think this poem is as effective as your other posting I commented on, maybe because the theme (trying to write is an up and down process) is supposed to be expressed in the metaphor of ferris wheel, but I don't have a very strong sense of it in the poem. Maybe if there were more of a circus or carnival setting woven into it, it would feel less passive.

Still it's a 5. But this could be a stronger poem with some revising. Just my opinion to take or leave.