All Comments on 'Dream Lovers'

I especially like the last four sets of lines. "false tears/urban raindrops" is wonderful. Thank you for sharing it.

Lonely !!

not quite what he said

and

l 5and 6 contrast nicely with 3 and 4

5ed

One of the best erotic poems I've read in a long time. The narrative had a dream-like quality to it, and then, voilá, it was a dream. Liked the "anti-climax" of the absent cricket at the end. Line breaks and syntax were great.