Fantastic story. Your writing style is great. This is real erotica not just a sex story.
I loved the character development. A sweet sappy story that really made me care about the characters. You have a real talent. You said in your intro that this was a stretch for you and you didn't know if you had it in you, but hopefully you do.
As you said at the beginning the story took a while to unfold but it was certainly worth persevering to the end. I thoroughly enjoyed it, thank you.
This was an excellent story...nice build-up to passion and beyond. Keep up the great work!!!
I loved the story and the story line, you have done a very good job and you seriously need to consider putting out a book, you would do very well with it.
Even without the erotic part (truly erotic rather than sex) it would be a great story.
As some comment said, if it was part of an e-book, I would gladly have paid for it.
I am bookmarking your name and looking forward to reading your contributions.
That was an especially warm and tender story with a wonderfully romantic ending. Not so much an erotic story as a romance with an erotic ending. I look forward to your future submissions and will now look to see what else you've already written. Thanks.
I think you should do more like this, a lot of learning to love someone different but not too different!
that is all Inhave to say - sums it up
Beautifully written and highly erotic.
This was a beautifully written story. I really enjoyed the start and the build up of repartee between the main characters. The 'Courtship' was very subtle on both their parts, as each was experiencing what the other was feeling. The 'Dinner Date' was the ice breaker and the ending was brilliant. A love story par excellence.
Please write more like this as the romance with a tinge of the erotic is a welcome change.
Excellent story, well written, holds the reader's attention. The story line builds the momentum to the actual point of coitus and the orgasmic climax.
In reading other's comments all I can say is ya me too I feel that way and the ones who are not positive can go fly a kite
Excellent character development and when they finally overcame their inhibitions that was nicely erotic. Great story!
Your story was well written and slowly built to it's climax while showing that "Good Deeds" usually get something good in return, and that doing the right thing (Payin it forward so to speak) always provides a suitable conclusion to good events.
First time reader and I enjoyed the story very much.
.. beautifully developed. Perhaps we all have a fairy godmother in our lives if we only listen. Thank you
Gorgeously written! Such a beautiful flow all around, as usual. So very sweet, touching and romantic. The sex scene described in wonderful detail, VERY HOT! I was squirming with delight!
That was a story you feel good about reading. The plot was intriguing. The characters were believable, and the ending was a great climax. Please write other stories like this one.
One of the few stories that I enjoy reading here. And its because of the way you write.
Thank you for that. And please, do not stop this. There aren't enough of your kind of writer around here right now.
but please use 'dessert' consistently, nobody eats 'desert'. :>)
Well done... I like the story and the development very much. I was short enough to keep my interest while being long and detailed enough to be a great story. One of the Best.... Keep writing.
Very well done! I much prefer this type of story. Excellent character development and pacing. Gladly gave you a 5.
THE STAR COUNTER IS BROKEN! IT WONT GO OVER 9000!!!!
sequel in the future
Very well written. There's the beginnings of a best-selling book here!
a great story with a lot of meaning hope to read more.
Your story was not only extremely well written, it was thought provoking, touching with that wonderful erotic edge that is so hard to capture when writing. Thanks for sharing!! Cheers Lance
I loved this story, not only was it well written but it was filled with warmth, tenderness, passion and no small amount love. It was a pleasure to read.
Keep up the good work Laura.
This is the type of story that I personally look for. Yes I enjoy the sex in these stories, but not at the expense of the story itself. And your writing is some of the highest quality I've seen on this site. Keep up the great work.
Wow! A great love story! Real well written-5 stars!!!!
...the humor was delightful, especially the exchange among the diner customers. We'll written!
Nice character development. Keep working on it. Great story idea and well crafted. Sorry to be anonymous but it's all I can spell. Thanks.
I just sat here and could not stop reading to go to bed, i had to finish. You drew me in right away with your characters, and the way it all built, slowly coming to where you brought it...well....i loved it...it was so worth me looking again for the kind of story i knew someone would write...thank you, i thoroughly enjoyed it, and running off to see what else you have written....(angel)
This was my favorite story from this challenge. I'm gonna have to reread this one. (I'm in the middle of another book right now, so Karma will have to wait. ;-)
This is the best story I've read in a long long time. Good job
...means the universe is rewarding your kindness, or lack thereof. I don't really see Karma at work around me, so it was nice to find it in a story.
It's been a while since I read one of yours, but I see you haven't lost your touch. It was quite a change from your usual edgy writing to something sweet, tender and possibly even heartwarming.
Just keep writing them and I'll keep reading them, and enjoying them.
No rabid sex no wild parties just a gentleness that unfolded as it went along.....a beautiful story of the two of them and how their lives intermingled over a period of time....starting at the diner then her being thrown out on the streets and finally moving in to the flat....so tender...no rush just a gentle build up to the climax.....loved it - so tender - so loving and very moving...just brilliant...well done....
An excellent story that caught my attention. Each page that I turned was a great read. Please write more like this!
great story, great!
good steamy climax
Realistic, but at 8 pages needlessly long.
I too believe in Karma, and have been rewarded many times over for even the smallest of good deeds. You take the filth out of what God has meant to be beautiful. I think that you are writing what Literotica should have. Thanks!
This was by far the best 'full story' I've read on here, from the beginning to end you had my attention! I'd actually like to read this in even more detail.. make it a full book, it's that good honestly, and has sooo much more potential detail that can be added to each character!!! I've cried, laughed out loud, smiled, and was turned on throughout this read! This could be a best seller for sure!!! Thumbs up and keep up the good work!
1. Love this story! And I love your style in general as well.
2. Two words best describe whoever left the anonymous comment dated 12/29/13... and they rhyme with "clucking grass-bowl".
It was a long story,,,,,true. But it took that much time to become familiar with the characters and we were introduced to some special people.
I loved the soul searching and the honesty,
The sex was sweet and hot at the same time.
Very well done.
This is what I've been looking for, and so rarely find on here. You have crafted a beautiful story with a great understanding of your subjects. I really identified with Joe, as a man who has lost his wife and tries to come to terms with life alone. Thank you for writing it.
To the author of the negative comment 29/12/13, get a life! You couldn't have written a quality story like this, so dont be so disrespectful.
I loved this story, so full of hope and the joy a second love can bring. Sometimes I just like to read a "feel good" story once in a while. 5 from me for a job well done.
I absolutely love the way this was written! Full characters who could be felt as real people, with real emotions. This is not smut, this is a well written, deep storyline, and you handled it beautifully. I love finding gems like this, and the gentleness contained in the storytelling was absolutely perfect. Thank you for posting this, this was a refreshing and wonderful read, great job! And although I'd love to see more of these two, you also did what many authors struggle with; you successfully gave the story closure at the end. Perfectly written!
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