by MSTarot
I love the hallway scene. (Where are the devil horns when you need them?)
please hurry but don't rush and stuff it up, one of the best in a long time
For some sneaky reason, I was not a bit surprised when the daughter came in. I hope there is a second chapter planned. Thank you for sharing
Their is nothing more pleasurable than the touch, the energy, the experience of an older woman. A Superb story of which i can draw on in real life. Thank you for making me remember the good times
hope you plan to continue it. Cant wait to read what happens next.
I'm a bit confused, I read it several times and could not find the part where he asked her out. Other than that its a good start and I hope there will be more.
Great story line, well written and this story needs some chapters!! The daughter/ex-girlfriend needs to find out she blew it, Mom's still got serious "game" and Jimmy wins here. Excellent all the way around!
BRAVO!!
Finding the right partner and experiencing that kind of eye rolling, jaw clenching, heart stopping lovin' is wonderful. Brings back memories. Thanks for the tickling the memory out of me!
Great story and well written. I would love to see part 2 with Lynn and his mom entering the discussion.
But I'm not a fan of the "no ending let the reader make one up" story. So I downgraded my score.
The arrival of the daughter I expected as soon as he went after the coffee.
There are a couple of discontinuities but they do not damage the story beyond comprehension.....
I enjoyed it ! It was light and I like the ending . Kaboom!
Thanks for the story 5******.
Tx cracker
One of the best I have read this year, Thanks for sharing looking forward to more great stories,
Loved the story, brought back memories of bygone years, but a brilliant start towards a most interesting second part.
Would it be likely that a second episode will follow....The potential must be explored... (Will welcome a response...(.kizambeezi@yahoo.com)
I agree this needs a sequel. Where it stopped leaves the reader hanging.
These two are two wonderful, too loving, too erotic not to revisit. Thank you!
Wonderful, erotic, passionate story. Totally loved it and your writing. If I hadn't loved the story to begin with, the dog having a joy-gasm coronary would have done it. Hysterical!
Seeing these two not only deal with her daughter and his mother but finding out how much is lust and how much is two people falling in love... I'm clearly hoping for the love angle, even if it does take work and maybe one convincing the other it's ok...
I was already thinking this story was great but after reading that ending I'm just begging for more
I love these short wonders you do. You set the scene, have the fun, and end it on a high note that makes us want more. For some reason it is still a satisfying ending so we aren't going crazy for more of the same story...not that we would mind if you kept going! :-) Thank you for writing these scenes.
Sincerely, Payenbrant
I love this situation plenty of opentions keep on trucking ten bears43
This built up impeccably to a fairly predictable twist. Apparently this is not the first of a multiple installment series. Too bad, the farther the narrative went, the more I liked the characters. Story stands on its own merits though. Easy, peasy. *****
A good stopping point of you have more coming, a few more paragraphs would have been nice if this was a planned ending point. I mean come on, you have to have the daughters reaction to MOM and old boyfriend getting it on...
Please give us more. It can be just the two of them falljng in love but its a great storyline
I love this, and I really respect writers who tell a good story with a well-developed plot. This is great stuff and worth more than the five stars we're allowed. But like some others, I would love to see the denouement when Lynn discovers her mother and her lover together.
A totally British term, an endearing appraisal.
Your talent of mixing your writing skills coupled with
A vivid imagination. Bring joy, excitement, thoughtfulness
and intrigue. You are a giant on this wonderful site.
Thanks you,
Peter
will return and rate this like a JPBob unfinished tale= 2 stars
even though if it is finished in a subsequent submission,,,it is a 5+ star work of art.
please don't make me rate it 2 stars.
well written with a nice surprise sending. Sometimes the best part of a story is that which is not told :)
Just a few things...
1] Bugged by the looking "as so much" of her thigh..., since no mistakes I could see before that.
2] Unless I missed eating the sandwiches, you never got to the "desert".
Oh the following paragraphs would be a joy to read.
How Mary explains it to her daughter would be a real eye-opener.
Thank you for an entertaining story.
HP
Fun story, though I'm not a fan of leaving things unfinished aka. open-ended.
that there STILL isn't a second chapter to it...
I still maintain that this story BEGS to be continued at least through ONE more chapter... It's just too enjoyable to have it stop there...
really does need a second (or more) chapters. lotsa fun to be had yet especially with his mom and her daughter in the picture.
Please write some more
Yet another amazing story, I really really hope you continue this on!
Very well-written - very professionally-written - and VERY erotic!
This is the second story of yours I've read, and now I'm looking for all the rest.
I just wish the author had addressed the look on the face of her daughter as she sauntered into the bedroom! I know it's a forlorn hope, but its like telling a joke and not telling the punchline. Well that's my two cents. By the way everything else was great! Loved it. 5 stars
FIRST TIME I EVER GAVE A 5 STAR!! ONE OF THE BEST STORIES I'VE READ ON LT!!! Keep writing and give us a second chapter of this!
Needs more! I want that confrontation with the ex/daughter and the aftermath. Can he and Mary make it work? Is it just sex? Or is there more? I enjoyed what there is and gave it 5* but would like a follow up or continuation.
LOL, I would pay good money to see Lynn's face when she sees her mom's bed and lover.