All Comments on 'A Likely Story'

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patientleepatientleeabout 10 years ago
Great story.

I love the hallway scene. (Where are the devil horns when you need them?)

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
Daughter

would like to read a part 2

hornycolhornycolabout 10 years ago
chapter 2

please hurry but don't rush and stuff it up, one of the best in a long time

Tarheels_FanTarheels_Fanabout 10 years ago
Not Surprised

For some sneaky reason, I was not a bit surprised when the daughter came in. I hope there is a second chapter planned. Thank you for sharing

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
Fantastic read

Their is nothing more pleasurable than the touch, the energy, the experience of an older woman. A Superb story of which i can draw on in real life. Thank you for making me remember the good times

fiesayntfiesayntabout 10 years ago
i loved it.

hope you plan to continue it. Cant wait to read what happens next.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
?????

I'm a bit confused, I read it several times and could not find the part where he asked her out. Other than that its a good start and I hope there will be more.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
AWESOME!!!

Great story line, well written and this story needs some chapters!! The daughter/ex-girlfriend needs to find out she blew it, Mom's still got serious "game" and Jimmy wins here. Excellent all the way around!

BRAVO!!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
Too much fun

Finding the right partner and experiencing that kind of eye rolling, jaw clenching, heart stopping lovin' is wonderful. Brings back memories. Thanks for the tickling the memory out of me!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
Needs part 2

Great story and well written. I would love to see part 2 with Lynn and his mom entering the discussion.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
Good stuff up to a point

But I'm not a fan of the "no ending let the reader make one up" story. So I downgraded my score.

bruce22bruce22about 10 years ago
Nice Stroke Story

The arrival of the daughter I expected as soon as he went after the coffee.

There are a couple of discontinuities but they do not damage the story beyond comprehension.....

txcrackertxcrackerabout 10 years ago

I enjoyed it ! It was light and I like the ending . Kaboom!

Thanks for the story 5******.

Tx cracker

chytownchytownabout 10 years ago
Great Piece Of Writing*****

One of the best I have read this year, Thanks for sharing looking forward to more great stories,

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
boom

hope there is a part 2

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
Loved it

That ending is a real cracker.

And part 2 will be - when ?

73

HP

MitchFraellMitchFraellabout 10 years ago
Excellent

I really liked it, thanks.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
Great Story Line

I hope more chapters follow soon. Thank You!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
bravo

wonderful--nice pace too

Paxo1944Paxo1944about 10 years ago
Brilliant

Loved the story, brought back memories of bygone years, but a brilliant start towards a most interesting second part.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
CAN WE SEND TIMOTHY HOME....Its getting crowded...

Would it be likely that a second episode will follow....The potential must be explored... (Will welcome a response...(.kizambeezi@yahoo.com)

Storm113Storm113about 10 years ago
more please

this really needs a sequel. please and thank you.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
Good story

I agree this needs a sequel. Where it stopped leaves the reader hanging.

TomorrowTodayTomorrowTodayabout 10 years ago
Sequel please

These two are two wonderful, too loving, too erotic not to revisit. Thank you!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago

Sequel!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
Excellent

Hadn't read a great one in a while.

bearsladybearsladyalmost 10 years ago

Wonderful, erotic, passionate story. Totally loved it and your writing. If I hadn't loved the story to begin with, the dog having a joy-gasm coronary would have done it. Hysterical!

AmbivalenceAmbivalencealmost 10 years ago
Definitely need more of this one...

Seeing these two not only deal with her daughter and his mother but finding out how much is lust and how much is two people falling in love... I'm clearly hoping for the love angle, even if it does take work and maybe one convincing the other it's ok...

VersewritersiVersewritersialmost 10 years ago
Sequel please

I was already thinking this story was great but after reading that ending I'm just begging for more

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Short wonders...

I love these short wonders you do. You set the scene, have the fun, and end it on a high note that makes us want more. For some reason it is still a satisfying ending so we aren't going crazy for more of the same story...not that we would mind if you kept going! :-) Thank you for writing these scenes.

Sincerely, Payenbrant

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
this is hot

I love this situation plenty of opentions keep on trucking ten bears43

LordSlamdawggLordSlamdawggover 9 years ago
Started off sooo slowly ( I like it like that ) !

This built up impeccably to a fairly predictable twist. Apparently this is not the first of a multiple installment series. Too bad, the farther the narrative went, the more I liked the characters. Story stands on its own merits though. Easy, peasy. *****

acupacupover 9 years ago
Second chapter...

A good stopping point of you have more coming, a few more paragraphs would have been nice if this was a planned ending point. I mean come on, you have to have the daughters reaction to MOM and old boyfriend getting it on...

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
more please

Please give us more. It can be just the two of them falljng in love but its a great storyline

bumblegrumbumblegrumover 9 years ago
Class

I love this, and I really respect writers who tell a good story with a well-developed plot. This is great stuff and worth more than the five stars we're allowed. But like some others, I would love to see the denouement when Lynn discovers her mother and her lover together.

PeterrowlandsPeterrowlandsover 9 years ago
You are the Nuts.

A totally British term, an endearing appraisal.

Your talent of mixing your writing skills coupled with

A vivid imagination. Bring joy, excitement, thoughtfulness

and intrigue. You are a giant on this wonderful site.

Thanks you,

Peter

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
if no second chapter in next 2 months

will return and rate this like a JPBob unfinished tale= 2 stars

even though if it is finished in a subsequent submission,,,it is a 5+ star work of art.

please don't make me rate it 2 stars.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
wonderful

well written with a nice surprise sending. Sometimes the best part of a story is that which is not told :)

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Few Small Issues

Just a few things...

1] Bugged by the looking "as so much" of her thigh..., since no mistakes I could see before that.

2] Unless I missed eating the sandwiches, you never got to the "desert".

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Get oujt of that!

Oh the following paragraphs would be a joy to read.

How Mary explains it to her daughter would be a real eye-opener.

Thank you for an entertaining story.

HP

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Too obvious

Can you say threesome? UGH!

Ib_SaysIb_Saysabout 8 years ago

Fun story, though I'm not a fan of leaving things unfinished aka. open-ended.

AmbivalenceAmbivalenceover 7 years ago
Drat... came a point I knew I'd read this before... and was disappointed...

that there STILL isn't a second chapter to it...

I still maintain that this story BEGS to be continued at least through ONE more chapter... It's just too enjoyable to have it stop there...

Turtle1952Turtle1952about 7 years ago
Fantastic

really does need a second (or more) chapters. lotsa fun to be had yet especially with his mom and her daughter in the picture.

Please write some more

lonelyhdlonelyhdalmost 7 years ago
Continue

Great story but it definitely needs another chapter

Michael12Michael12almost 6 years ago
Please carry on

Yet another amazing story, I really really hope you continue this on!

gunmakergunmakerover 5 years ago

BWAHAHAHA! Love it.

johnkalagianjohnkalagianover 5 years ago
Great Read

Very well-written - very professionally-written - and VERY erotic!

This is the second story of yours I've read, and now I'm looking for all the rest.

CrazyDaveTrucker60CrazyDaveTrucker60about 5 years ago
Oh for the love of that last paragraph!

I just wish the author had addressed the look on the face of her daughter as she sauntered into the bedroom! I know it's a forlorn hope, but its like telling a joke and not telling the punchline. Well that's my two cents. By the way everything else was great! Loved it. 5 stars

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 5 years ago
Laughing

What a great ending.

auwingerauwingerover 4 years ago
I can't wait ...

... for Chapter two of this story!!

SANDMAN786SANDMAN786over 3 years ago
5

FIRST TIME I EVER GAVE A 5 STAR!! ONE OF THE BEST STORIES I'VE READ ON LT!!! Keep writing and give us a second chapter of this!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 3 years ago
5 Stars

Not good writing at all .. Great writing is what this Story was

AnonymousAnonymousabout 3 years ago

Interesting but feels rushed and needs an ending.

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

Needs more! I want that confrontation with the ex/daughter and the aftermath. Can he and Mary make it work? Is it just sex? Or is there more? I enjoyed what there is and gave it 5* but would like a follow up or continuation.

rbloch66rbloch66about 2 years ago

Beautiful story! Hot and heartfelt!

Mojo648Mojo648about 2 years ago

AND.......... WHAT THE F**K HAPPENED NEXT?

Diecast1Diecast1about 2 years ago

Great story , like it a lot. AAAAA++++

SatyrDickSatyrDickover 1 year ago

[19.11.22]

Sexcellent!

11/10!!!!!

AnonymousAnonymous11 months ago

This was just hot, and poignant, and funny, and loving, and just delightful !

dirtyoldbimandirtyoldbiman10 months ago

LOL, I would pay good money to see Lynn's face when she sees her mom's bed and lover.

AnonymousAnonymous10 months ago

This is priceless.

goodshoes2goodshoes27 months ago

Perfectly written. Great laugh by me at the ending.

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