by xelliebabex
You did a wonderful job, showing an awful lot of creativity with the characters and the setting. I want to see the movie! Nice tie in to the song too; also creative rather than literal. Great work.
I liked the fantasy aspect, and how it wasn't such a literal interpretation of the song. Kyelle is great -- the kind of female character I really enjoy. Mentally and emotionally strong, more than physical, and doing what she must when she must.
It felt very rushed at the end, I would like to see a rewrite with the ending expanded upon.
A nicely constructed story, though the pacing seemed a little drawn out in some places and too dense in others. The run-on sentences made it more difficult to read than it needed to be.
A little ambitious, maybe, but I liked it overall. Great, creative use of the song. Interesting world and characters, but a little overwhelming right off the bat. Nice job!
I just couldn't finish. Too many errors and the difficult story line made reading this mess impossible. No stars as I didn't finish.