All Comments on 'The Boss Lady Pt. 01'

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago
Good, so far

Should have been a longer chapter.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago
great start

Part 2 please make sure he fucks her Good a d cums on here face.

Nyhardy82Nyhardy82almost 10 years ago
Interesting

Good start! I hope you continue it and continue it soon.

Story1986Story1986almost 10 years agoAuthor

I am almost done with part two so I should be submitting it soon!!! Thank you for all of the feedback. I am glad you enjoy my story!!!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago
Nice Start

You have the beginning of a very interesting story. There are many directions you could go with this. My suggestion would be to create a multi chapter story/novel. You have the audience on the hook run with it.

ariesgirlariesgirlalmost 10 years ago

I knew she was setting them up so they could have sex. Jack fell for it. He has no proof she is telling the truth, not saying her husband isn't cheating but this is asking for trouble.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago

She has NO proof, only the fact he didn't come home? Well why would he want to, to a bitch like her? She's setting Jack up.

Story1986Story1986almost 10 years agoAuthor

Part Ii is done and has been submitted!!

LeFrog08LeFrog08almost 10 years ago
that was a tease!

Stopping at that point and leaving us hanging....tsk tsk tsk.....

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago
Good story!!

This is really a good story line, however it could use some work on character development and dialogue..... Also a little more of the dirty details, so to speak!

dirtyomandirtyomanover 9 years ago
My2cents worth.

Set up or not, old man cheating or not. If Jack don't FUCK her, hes a damned fool!!!!

She doing a good job of seducing him, & he better take her up on it!!

Gunna go read ch2 & 3, cus I wanna know do she be a good fuck or what.

This is good "Whackin" material, Thanks for posting it.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Too early to tell.

Not enough has happened to judge much.

I can say there is promise.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 2 years ago

Great!

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