All Comments on 'The Artist'

Great story 5 stars!

Your depiction of young love, hopeful and hesitant, is a breath of fresh air in a too-often crude genre. I empathized with both Poppy and Toby, and their thoughts and actions rang true.

I particularly like the way you didn't go for the obligatory "simultaneously orgasm" that seems to be almost a rule on this site. Sorry, but two people who haven't even made out before are about as likely to be able to synchronize their climaxes as they are to win a dance contest without practicing.

Two virgins coming together over a drawing, she might have been shy but set her sights on having him and did all she could to seduce him quite different for a change from the man after the woman and that made it all the more fun.

I know that someone is going to bitch about the word Cooch or Coochie instead of pussy, I thought it was cute, I myself don't like the word Cunt as it sounds dirty and disrespectful.

Thanks for the smile for the day.

Still bored....

This is a very rich story. I particularly liked how you started out with the roommate and moved on to Poppy. I'm going to read more of your stuff.

This story was quite well written. The build-up to the climax (so to speak) was tantalizing. Quite distinct for this genre. Also there were no spelling or grammar errors, also above the standard for literotica. This was my first 5 rating.

This story also reminded me of the first girl I was intimate with, who was the driver. I remember her saying something like, "I'm on the goddam pill. When are you going to get down to business?"

Which I did, of course. And we're still married.

Amazing job, especially since you included two things I inherently dislike but still made an enjoyable read. I can't stand the word 'cooch'...even vagina is a sexier word, and I have a hair phobia, but you still made an incredible story including these two things. Thanks for your time writing this for us.

The Artist is a beautiful story. You are a talented writer. It would not surprise me in the least if you were able to get some of your work published for real.

In the Sea of mediocrity it is a delight to come across a story like this. Thank you.

Great story, very well crafted, and a real pleasure to read. Thank you.

Great storyline line, well written! Thank you. (5++)

Sweet, affectionate, and really steamy - I love it! And Poppy had just the right mix of shyness, determination, and erotic urge to make her very believable. Thanks!

Truly sweet erotic: delightful.

Beautifully written and erotic. Very romantic and realistic.

a bit difficult to accept as plausible. I started questioning when you brought up sending a copy home with each model. Original, hand drawn, artwork, is not easily and quickly reproduced or duplicated.

So erotic, beautiful word pictures made the story entirely plausible. Toby behaves like a lot of artists I've known through the years, shy, lacking self confidence, hiding behind a sketchbook letting his talent speak for him. Poppy is just a sweetheart, so cute, so shy, so girly but not so shy she doesn't get what she wants. I loved how the story ended. How it wasn't entirly focused on the act of having sex more the chase.

Beautifully designed, crafted, and executed. You are one of the best.

Reading this was so "liveable" - pulling me into the story and making it seem more memory than fiction. This was so believable that it might have been a journal entry. I thoroughly enjoyed this reading.

What a great writer you are.

I hoped for the happy ending and it was all so wonderful.

Thank you.

nigelrlane@fsmail.net

Combination of art and romance - both sharing their first times. Excellent writing. Continue giving your exceptional skills.

You told this story in a way that describes young love in a tender way. We got a chance to get to know the characters. The reversal of roles truly reflects how some find love in their life.Thank you!

Thanks for a great story.