All Comments on 'It Was an Accident, Honest!'

What a great story!

Good story, Happy made daddy happy and herself, now what? Do they keep on with the happy times?

I've been reading here occasionally for a few months - just for the purient thrill. More than a few stories are sexually arousing - I am, after all, a horny guy - but VERY few are well written. This was a rare exception.

Your narrative voice is both unique and engaging. Your 1st person narrator has an incredibly distinct persona - with a wonderfully ironic perspective. The nonlinear chronology and perfectly placed foreshadowing give the air of spontaneity, but are actually well crafted to draw the reader into your web.

But most endearingly: your diction is irresistible! From puns to allegory to hyperbole, you paint not only a vivid visual image, but a succinct emotional development of Happy's journey to moral hell - and physical bliss.

I had fun reading the story, with both a smile on my face and a fully tumescent pestle!

On a more tedious note:

Despite your narrative skill, your editing abilities leave something to be desired. There are myriad grammatical and spelling errors that need to be cleaned up. I would suggest you obtain the services of a competent editor. As a former university writing instructor, I volunteer myself - but do find someone. That third eye can be invaluable.

I hope that you are writing things other than erotica. Your gift transcends this genre.

This is a reposted story.

Belongs to Oediplex though he has not posted them on this website, he has posted this and the other story this user posted on another site.

Very happy story for both.