- Non-Erotic Poetry
- A Moment by the Mailbox
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Click hereA feather fell from the sky,
it was white, like just fallen snow.
And it was beautiful.
Yeah, it held so much beauty.
And the feather kept floating,
that feather from an angel's wings kept floating.
It was beautiful,
you were beautiful,
and you kept floating.
- COMMENTS
Anonymousalmost 8 years agoYour 'poem' does have romance I'll give you that, but however it needs work. A whole shit load of it. Becouse all I hear is feather, feather, feather,feather....etc.....
KOLKOREalmost 17 years agoAlways a sucker for poems which tempt me with 'a moment',
I found one which to me was a moment in 'no time' or rather in magical time, especially given the last lines. <P>
As far as the selection of cliched materials, here is another proof that what counts is not the initial selection of materials but the final treatment they are given in the context of the work.
duddle146over 17 years agoThis rendering had such an ethereal feeling - a pleasant mood if you will. Beautiful images.
Tathagataalmost 19 years agosome of your other work I think I can safely say the " cliches" were intentional.
dreamy with a hint of surrealism.
Perhaps even madness.
but still.....
floating
and beautiful
nicely done
Anonymousalmost 19 years agois cliche to a point.
nothing is original anymore
no words can we think of that
will convince someone
'wow thats a first'.
but regardless, you put
the words just right
and i love the way you write.
4°
Scott N. Leavittalmost 19 years agoYou use a lots of pretty words that I like, but I don't know your meaning for the poem. It reads good though!!!
ps You have a stupid name 9unless your a preist9
sackalmost 19 years agolike white as fallen snow, that's pretty common. Ending was unexpected though, that nailed my "5" vote!
