- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Bach's Lunch
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Click hereHave a nibble on a Toccata
just right for a Suite tooth
Dance a Sarabande while munching-
a Courante will also do
Make partitions from a Partita
while creating your culinary Invention
Just a Prelude to the main dish
a Mass of confectionary delight
accompanied by a side dish Variation
sizzling with juicy Passion
a Concerto of love
a Cantata of joy
a Sonata of hope
But please-
don't throw away the Bachs
Mozart's on the menu tomorrow!
- COMMENTS
swallowedscreamover 16 years agoDelightful. Perhaps I am possessed of a pedestrian mind, but I thought it perfect. Although I respect the opinions of others who have commented, I did not have any problems with this piece. Well done!
LeBrozabout 17 years agoThis poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 34,000 poems.
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duddle146over 17 years agoBeing a Jazz musician I feel like this is old home week and consider it a distinct delight to review this poem. I, of course loved and got a kick out of Mr. Sack's musical terms and great sense of humor. Bravo Mr. Sack!
Anonymousover 18 years agoVery similar to what a middle school student did a few years ago. That one received a passing grade. I guess yours does, too, although you are well past middle school.
dcpoet44over 18 years agohere is nice. and if i was a listener of classical music, i could offer something. nevertheless, it seems to be a piece that reflects a particular mood. say for instance, if it was ACDC or any other rock group, its tone would thump a bit harder. aside from that, if the walls started to shake, and pictures started to fall, there might be a good laugh. would you expect anything less from someone that likes to be sarcastic and humorous from time to time.
TheRainManover 18 years agoEasy to chew, but I think the constant beating on musical terms becomes too predictable, and might bore an advanced reader for sure. In my opinion, you should view this as a work in progress, and see if you can add a more subtle touch to it, a bit of unpredictability.
Technically, there is certainly nothing to quibble about. It is just a matter of suddeness and a bit of surprise, which I think would add greatly to the overall quality of the piece.
Anonymousover 18 years agoDelius ..u know its on our morning alarm clock...you have some very unique word play here ...and well put together ..very polished and tight...lovely..blue
