Beneath the Towers

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Beneath the towers

They played with their cars,
beaten up bombs of yesterday,
revving, smoking
and joking among themselves. Skidding

on the road, they ignored her
dune climb as the black
beach bogged her footprints.

Though the eye never wavered
from the green horizon, she walked

to the sea edge and beyond,
beneath the wave towers.
She was no longer alone.

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tazz317tazz317almost 12 years ago
LEAVING HER WORLD BEHIND

she trod into the future. TK U MLJ LV NV

duddle146duddle146over 17 years ago
Wonderful.

The imagery in this rendering was just outstanding. Very enjoyable.

LeBrozLeBrozover 17 years ago
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POW ~ this has got really powerful impact with imagery that keeps your eye on her final walk.

Bill DadaBill Dadaover 18 years ago
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Good poetry is great exercise for the mind, and my mind just had a great work out.

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
Cool!

Love those last two strophes in particular!

Fly

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
A very visual Poem!

The imagry was wonderful in this. It's short but says a lot. There is easily enough here to write a story from.

You have a nice easy style!

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
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"they ignored her

dune climb as the black

beach bogged her footprints."

I could totally see this, and it reads wonderfully

sacksackover 18 years ago
cool little poem...

makes a big impact within its small compass

twelveoonetwelveooneover 18 years ago
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the better of the two, this one has arresting images

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