- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Better Left Unspoken
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Click hereI stood facing the wind listening1
searching for echoes
striving to hear
the lost laughter
of mistaken luncheons
and forbidden phone calls
running my fingers
through the undertones
of careful conversation
where everything is said
I never said
I'm not afraid of pain
I just don't fear it
as much as apathy
So now I will try
to keep things unvoiced
to hide a half
of my dreaming whole
better to agonize
over not expressing
then for you to leave
I'll keep desires secret
even from you
say words under my breath
into the wind
that invisibly whispers
through your hair
and then you are mine in victorious feeling2
1in On The Back Of A '57 Indian, by jd4george ©2004
2in "Continuous Feeling", by Champagne1982©2004
- COMMENTS
LeBrozabout 17 years agoThis poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 34,500 poems.
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duddle146about 17 years agoThis poem is filled with wonderful visual images and builds to completion.
duddle146over 17 years agoPreferring the road less traveled more afraid of apathy than pain. Beautifully expressive! Simple and exquisite!
Below my favorite lines...
I never said
I'm not afraid of pain
I just don't fear it
as much as apathy
LeBrozover 17 years agoSubtle word craftmanship
Well woven phrses around two lines
Borrowed from two of Lit's own.
WickedEveover 19 years agorunning my fingers
through the undertones
of careful conversation
Love this!
average ginaover 19 years agoI'm not a good poet reader. I don't look for secret messages or tricks or gags. I just read and go from there. From this poem, you must be a fantastic poet, because the subtle touches is lovely to a point of, from previous opinions, the most astute enjoy it as well as the obtuse (to avoid calling myself "doopud").
BooMerengueover 19 years agoTheres always magic in your words, Bel- and this is a great example! Thanks!
sandspikeover 19 years agobut I will now. You can write and this is cool. Great
job of describing how we all feel at sometime. There is a
song with the line 'should I stay or should I go, I don't
know.' Well, you answer the question well.
CharleyHover 19 years agoI am enjoying your work more and more. This one has am amazingly natural flow, and there is a powerful sense of feeling that permeates even the simplest of phrases. Some of your line choices are supurb and lol - if I could see the poem while typing this, I'd tell you exactly what! Needless to say, its a terrific one Bel. I think you exceeded yourself. :)
impressiveover 19 years ago"So now I will try
to keep things unvoiced
to hide a half
of my dreaming whole"
... really resonates with me, Bel. Nice work!
~Imp
