- Erotic Poetry
- chocolate petals
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Click herea flower grows in the north
but her roots are in
aksum
blooms a new kind of beauty
in the land of
linnaeus
- COMMENTS
tazz317over 11 years agoin the same soil or time zones, hence transplants, TK U MLJ LV NV
annaswirlsabout 13 years agoimpressed
was worried for a minute by the title, in this place chocolate and petals can both be abused, this was on
theognisabout 13 years agoAuthorThanks to Esperanza, raconteuse, tigerjen, Angeline, Tristesse, 1201, and Pep. All much appreciated.
Esperanza_Hidalgoabout 13 years agoI understand your intention after reading all the comments. If it is how I interpret, it is nice, but if isn't, it made me make my own interpretation, which is also nice.
raconteuseabout 13 years agoOhhhh so spare, delicious, delicately lovely. So fresh...to be absorbed in its budding beauty; not dissected. Thank you.
theognisabout 13 years agoAuthorFlower wasn't meant literally, and Linnaeus wasn't only the father of botanical classification; he was also the father of human classification.
Angelineabout 13 years agoOk so I looked up Askum and Linnaeus and then understood the references in the two strophes and how the title fits the poem. I can interpret it a few different ways, which is good, but my main problem with it (and the reason I gave it a 4 instead of a 5) is that I feel the two strophes need something more to connect them up better. Without that, you're asking a lot from a reader to make connections between a flower from Ethiopia and the father of botanical classification. I'm not sure what I am to make of the association between these two things other than that they are associated. I feel like there's a piece missing. Just my opinion of course but a reader usually doesn't bring such esoteric knowledge to the reading.
theognisabout 13 years agoAuthorI hope this isn't taken wrong, but I decided not to capitalize because I didn't want the poem to be easily accessible. I wanted people to wonder what I meant, and to solve the puzzle on their own.
