- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Close to one's Maker
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Click hereClose to one's Maker
in the Lap of Nature
absolutely nude
cool dude
feel the body breath
without fabric , textiles or sheath
the rush of cool breeze
Oxygen if you please
in the Lap of Nature
Close to one's Maker
- COMMENTS
Ashesh9about 10 years agoAuthorComment Erectus would have made " lets all get nakkid' ......" : i miss Erectus on this site !
Ashesh9about 10 years agoAuthorHarry , Tod , Clearday , Oldbear it's so nice to be appreciated by one's peers !!!
Oldbear63about 10 years agoI feel like this one is more personal than usual for you and that you are opening up more of yourself in your poems. Would love to see a Lesse comment on this. To borrow a phrase - thanks for sharing.
Cleardaynowabout 10 years agoI agree with Greenmountaineer & Todski. Though not altogether sure it makes me think of meditation as it is so funky. But then I don't meditate - perhaps meditation can be like this!
Well done.
todski28about 10 years agoAbout the word breathe, this gives me a sense of deep meditation and thought, I like this ash, the rhyme scheme helps to pull the reader along, it is a circle where you could as easily see a man naked meditating on a rock contemplating god, the universe or whatever, of it could be a babe in a parents arms at birth.
Ashesh9about 10 years agoAuthorappreciation : your encouragement is like an International Jury Award on this site !!! & yes it would have rhymed better also & I should have put in " Breathe " ---thanks again .
greenmountaineerabout 10 years agoI like this, Ash. It had a "circle of life" feel to it, not overdone. I think line 5 has a typo. Didn't you want to type "breathe?"
