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Click hereCoraline carves music out of granite
by blowing kisses with tectonic patience
onto every succumbing shoreline
that have felt the soles of lovers
standing pillar posted faithful
staring blindness into submission
at horizons hiding history and others
long since gone
Hear Coraline sing the ballad of waves
crashing her kisses on bare rock and
sloping sand so seemingly eternal
wearing them down to erase
the memory of sorrowed soles
patiently waiting on shores decreasing
for a pocketful of folly dreams
long since gone
Coraline whispers her soothing song
into hearts of her children waiting
for a tomorrow that will never come
Be still my hearts, be dry my tears
yesterday took, the next dawn will give
and breathe a new haven to contain
all your jubilance and love regarded
long since gone
This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 35,000 poems.
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So many images issue forth from this piece; it lures you back in for another read or two or three...
So many images issue forth from this piece; it lures you back in for another read or two or three...
I've gone and sumbitted an edit. I still can't believe that I let that one slip by. I checked the text three times.
Hugs and kisses to all of you for putting up with my flimsy. :)
-Lin
THE perfect word choice in that context Lin, it brought to my mind the images of people walking on the beach and I have a tiny foot fetish anyway, but I think it was the best word to use
umm, yeah Liar, I did mean it with a Capital C
< giant raspberry> :)
Yes, my fishy friend, that was most intentional. Souls woulda been too cheesy IMO.
Lin, the first word may not be the sole mistake. You write:
"that have felt the soles of lovers"
and
"the memory of sorrowed soles"
Do you mean "sole" (which does work in a footprint/wearing down sense) or "soul" (which would be more traditional).
Either or both ways the poem is most enjoyable. >?(((><
A beautiful read, somewhere between dream and myth, flowing like the sea it portrays.
#L
ps. Maria, don't you mean Coraline instead of coraline? ;)
sigh, groan, grumble, mumble *off to move one letter and resubmit*
hug,
-Lin
I like the structure of your sentences and your word choices, your imagery is really good, but you misspelled the very first word in your poem if you meant coraline and that would be logical... I think this one is potentially too good to have been posted in such haste