- Non-Erotic Poetry
- dawning...
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Click herethat light that falls on rock
rose alone on the mountain
in air that would shrink the words
of who is without you
what of the peace of heaven
is longing enough to sustain
these eyes that see through tears
behold a wavering sun
that which glints on steel
of another dawning
beheld by failing hands
of who is without you
- COMMENTS
twelveooneover 16 years agoAuthorWOW, how nice to see it dawned on someone. And, yeh Bog, you can't get it, even the rose has a tendency to disappear.
Bill Dadaalmost 17 years agoThis fucking rocks 12. The language is amazing, it sounded so fine read aloud. It is so good to see your work again.
wildsweetonealmost 17 years agoit took me four reads and i got it, thanks to the unusual language. utterly beautiful.
technically, i was torn between wanting punctuation added in and leaving it out. and then i realised, leaving it out gave me open boundaries, adding it in would lose something from the poem.
thank you for sharing this poem and for giving me much to think about.
bogusbrigalmost 17 years agoMore complex simplicity. I can't fathom it but I don't think I need to, it conjures up enough imagery to want to go with it.
Amyfriendalmost 17 years agobeautiful poetry and exceptionally well done. Thank you so much.
