- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Extraction
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Click hereIn my mind it’s so clear:
You get the furniture in the den.
I’ll take the living room.
You get the master bedroom suite.
I’ll take the futon.
I can divide our belongings
fair and equitably
down to the most insignificant
material object.
But tell me, please:
Who gets the heartbreak?
Who takes the blame?
Who gets the guilt?
Who takes the anger?
And which one of us
will keep the little blue vase
that sits by the side of the bed?
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- COMMENTS
LeBrozover 16 years agoThis poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 38,500 poems.
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Tathagataabout 19 years agofeelings , and we all have the list of things.
I love the mystery of the blue vase.
Very nice work Mistress O.
CupidsGurlabout 19 years agoWhat a great poem.
I loved the flow and the simplistic wording.
Short and to the point.
Another One to keep and re-read.
More Please~~!!!!
twelveooneabout 19 years agoMiss O,
This is very simple masterful writing, it is like an airplane taking off.
But tell me, please:
Who gets the heartbreak?
Who takes the blame?
Who gets the guilt?
Who takes the anger?
And which one of us
will keep the little blue vase
that sits by the side of the bed?
Last three lines, really make, take this to another level. Vase is the perfect word, maybe because I'm thinking in spanish.
I would give some consideration to changing the word order of blame and heartbreak.
Bridget69about 19 years agocannot be as easily chosen and equally distributed . Very thought provoking.
Anonymousabout 19 years agoPerfect ending.
I love the little blue vase.
I pictured it right away
empty, fragile
the rest of the poem was just a lead up to this verse.
sigh
aswirls
Anonymousabout 19 years agoDid you think about using 'urn' instead of vase? It would make it more poignant.
