- Non-Erotic Poetry
- fallen rain
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Click herecaptured in the arms
of fallen branches
roots whispering
in death chants
cradled sigh softly
falls to the ground
as the rain stains
the soil in silence
- COMMENTS
LeBrozabout 16 years agoThis poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 38,500 poems.
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YDDabout 20 years agoThe title ties in nicely as a first line.
The sibilance at the end calls of rain sounds.
I enjoy the image and can almost feel the wet,
but I don't understand the root's "death chants".
Has there been a long drought?
Do the "stains" indicate this?
Angelineabout 20 years agoGreat touch using "death chants" and "stain." They create a really nice tension that keeps the poem from being overly sweet. Love it!
Tathagataabout 20 years agowonderful image
painted with that magic fantasy touch
I do love your stuff
thank you
WickedEveabout 20 years agoThis poem is a light touch--smooth. When you read it, there's not a single ripple in it.
jthserraabout 20 years agograbbed me, something in the subtle wording, gentle images just works.
jim : )
