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- Greener Than Blue-Green Blues
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When Miles Davis started using electricity in his concerts, the vigilantes of taste and crosswalks raised a clamour of revolt against the heresy. It was right about then that was announced the protection plan for the trees in my backyard. One day, a minister without cabinet and a sub-secretary of some culture came to tell us they had signed a protocol with nature, the roots and the clouds. And that they could now declare the start of Spring whenever they wanted. After that, vagrant cats started appearing, as well as some dead dogs early in the morning. One of those mornings, a red squirrel was passing by. I asked for the others, and he told me they had took up arms to restore the rights of the birds to sing the dead. Ever since they had started living in a fable, there were too much blood and corpses.
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LeBrozalmost 17 years agoThis poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 36,000 poems.
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LouXIVabout 18 years agoFirst, I love the title, which even captures the rhythm of the Blues. And what an intro to the heresy of government. I think I am right to see this as a political parable about power - the arrogance to legislate the seasons. And how subtle to have a minister 'without cabinet' rather than patently without culture or couth. From 'roots' to 'clouds,' and animals of land and air - how wonderful a fable is that can encompass the universe and the insults against it in such a short passage - Bravo! We live in this fable too much, but I hope some day we'll overcome the Blues, and merely relish the green of spring.
Anonymousabout 18 years agoI am not a fan of prose poetry, but having started reading Rimbaud, both you and he have the ability to make it work.
As a fable it works and is apt also.
Eve probably liked it because of the squirrel.
I apologise for not leaving a name here. I have my reasons.
WickedEveabout 18 years agoI entirely missed your E poem until I saw your comment on the board. I like that you do your own thing and you're original, L. :)
Anonymousabout 18 years agoSome good ideas but sub-optimally presented especially the last third.Couple of grammatical errors too - unlike you.Not your best work but I am assessing you by your own standards.
RDG
dcpoet44about 18 years agoand its loosely written, which necessarily isn't a bad thing. but what i'm intrigued the most about is about the trees. in a way it reminds me of a song by the rock group rush called "the trees" of where the trees fight amongst themselves. so i see things based off that, such as the squirrels and the birds etc. there is more to this piece than what meets the eye. that is my take and i like it....don
Anonymousabout 18 years agoThis is good, and certainly imaginative, but what's with the squirrel?
