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Click herelong slow deep kisses
tongues dancin'
I'm your slutty princess
fuckin' with you all the time
feeling your arousal against me
our clothes fall to the floor
we are uninhibited and free
ooooo baby, I want more
shove me on the bed
taking complete control
pin my hands above my head
shoving your cock in my honey hole
as my legs for you I spread
kiss me fervently
lick me sensually
squeeze me tenderly
suck me feverishly
fuck me fanatically
make me writhe and moan
screaming out your name
keep me begging for more
and when we are spent
pull me close against you
with your hand across my tits
as we both drift off to dreamland
Very nice. anon has some good points - keep up the good work.
which are a wonderful expression of a modern day liberated woman poet's physical description of lovemaking and her emotions. Let me make a few suggestions on some of the lines.
{long slow deep kisses
tongues dancin'} nice descriptive words
I'm your slutty princess } slutty- sets the tone but might be omitted
{fuckin' with you all the time} fucking with you can have more than one meaning
but here seems to be sexual, but not a feminine phrase
{feeling your arousal against me
our clothes fall to the floor
we are uninhibited and free
ooooo baby, I want more
shove me on the bed
taking complete control
pin my hands above my head} this is rhythmic and exciting
{shoving your cock in my honey hole} you are headed in the right direction but "honey hole" derails your effort, find a better word
{as my legs for you I spread} this is backwards, no rhyme here, be direct, "I spread my legs for you"
{kiss me fervently
lick me sensually
squeeze me tenderly
suck me feverishly
fuck me fanatically
make me writhe and moan
screaming out your name
keep me begging for more
and when we are spent
pull me close against you
with your hand across my tits
as we both drift off to dreamland} this is well done although one might upgrade from "tits" to "breasts". These lines are the meat of the poem, the best part and might even stand alone.
Good luck with your writing.