tagErotic PoetryIn Our Room at Pedregal

In Our Room at Pedregal

byEllenMore©

Tamed by Miltown, we lie on Mother’s bed;
the rising sun in war paint dyes us red
—Robert Lowell, "Man and Wife"


Restless in the night, I could not sleep.
Your release had come too fast for mine
to keep a matching pace and, breathless,
I was left abandoned, incomplete.

While you slumbered, with my hands I tried
to rekindle something of the heat
that so briefly flared in our bed's grate.
But my fingertips, too dull and slow

for anything like love, merely rubbed
the way one would massage a child's ache—
as anesthetic, in no way lust.

Your breathing, regular as the surf
beyond our window, did not relax
nor comfort. So. Ambien, my sweet.

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by greenmountaineer09/14/18

I thought “abandoned” was a bit harsh but reflected more on the epigraph and last line, and it fit for me. “Ambien,” however, made it too much like whimsical light verse unless that was your intention.more...

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by Piscator09/14/18

5 stars

And yes, at times, guilty as charged.

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by Anonymous09/09/18

the previous comment

has said it all --nice work although I'd prefer a clearer conclusion but maybe I'm dumb

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by Anonymous09/06/18

exquisite

What a sensitive, insightful, beautifully-written and gorgeously-haunting group of poems.

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