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Click hereBetwixt twinkling
stars ,
eyes in
parallel reverie
stir
temporal minds
to curve and contour.
Visually aware,
man in multiplex
render reasons
for sensualities
touch.
Closed lids lost
in soft scented strokes
of Cleary Sage .
Beauty not found
by the eye
but, movement
of her vibes,
sway of her hips,
fullness of her breasts
finding his secret
vulnerabilities
driving him to Love...
in blue's erotic charm this poems words moved me (~_~) a very nice write.
Once again you have that sensual touch that pulls us in. We read and memorize your words for they are very poetic with a touch of spice. Loved it my friend ~
I enjoyed reading this mystical read
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actually loved "betwixt" thought it worked very well, pulling reader in - creating a slight sense of feyness that accorded well with the remainder ... the use of "cleary sage" effective - precise imagry. Loved it blue.
Betwixt twinkling
I like the word betwixt. I've used twixt in a poem. But I'd change it here to between. The "ixt" part of the word is too sharp/harsh beside twinkling. Between is softer and sounds better to the ear. Between twinkling stars.
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for sensualities
touch.
Is touch a noun or verb here? Do sensualities touch? Or are you saying sensuality's touch? Not sure because of the "for."
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Beauty not found
by the eye
but, movement
of her vibes
Comma should come before a conjunction.
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Overall, not a bad poem. :)