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Click hereSlanted rays
shine on gardens
unattended
Faded headline
in the milkbox
time suspended
Slender grass
hides her footprints
next to mine
Muddied birdbath
distant piping
nature retreats
Peeling paint
rusty nails
broken hearts
Waiting
She will return...
In spite of the beautiful imagery there still exists an air of sadness about this lovely rendering. Beautiful.
It's amazing how a few words can bring a little melancholy to the heart!
Written with soul!
more of an opinion, okay, I just think it would be much stronger without the last line. Thats all :) good work
of emotion exploding in this one......love this image:
Peeling paint
rusty nails
broken hearts
solid piece......don
much into poetry, that's my sister's thing, but I liked this one.
My kind of ending. You did a great job building the reader. I love your word choice. I had no idea where this was going to go. That's great in poetry. Thanks for sharing. Most definitely, excellent work!
and nothing short of
VOID and EMPTY..
very well done..
-sGp-
this one sent a chill down my spine, the hopeless hopefulness of the last line added impact to the already strong words above. Well done...
jim : )
So few words, such a big punch.
I love it Sack.
You painted a beauty of a picture here,
heartfelt and ... hopfull for you~!!