- Erotic Poetry
- Three Haikus
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Critiquing a haiku if it’s not written in exactly 5-7-5 syllables is like claiming it’s not a real poem unless it rhymes.
A better way to think of a haiku, IMHO, is three lines of poetry, the first two setting the reader up for the third line which seems unrelated to the first two, but upon reflection, gives new insight into them.
Here are my three erotic examples. I did keep the syllable count more traditional for those sticklers out there.
Multi-tasking
I suck your hard one
and swallow its salty cum
both, while chewing gum.
Meet My Gaze and Nod
Sexy one afar
entangle me in Tango
I want in your dance.
Over-coming Disabilities
You are blind and deaf
so use braille-able fingers
and just read my lips
- COMMENTS
Bn2falmost 2 years agoI am no “stickler.” This is my pet peeve - why give a detailed explanation that’s longer than your 3 pieces combined? Whenever I see this I can’t help but wish the explanation would’ve been a poem or Haiku itself. This is an honest criticism that’s not intended to be taken as a personal attack. You’ve not done this with any of your submissions so I’m guessing this is something that had just been rubbing you wrong.
I’m all in on you pushing the boundaries and redefining literature and look forward to reading your continued work.
