- Non-Erotic Poetry
- To: You
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Click hereIt seems as if it’s been years since I have talked to you, rather than hours. The night was cold and lonely, and it was the dark, not you, who caressed my skin.
I miss you so I cry.
I cry so much that it seems I am drowning in tears.
You were always there to hold my hand and give me a shoulder to cry on. Now, all that I have is a tear-stained pillow and a handful of wishes that will never come true.
I wanted you to be there when I lost hope, but you weren’t and you never will be.
You are as far away as the ocean is wide.
I pray that you will open your eyes and see what I have put before you, riding on the many waves of the ocean. That you will once again accept this gift, and not throw it away as if it were nothing.
I know what you want, what you wish for, and I can give it to you……if you’ll just let me.
- COMMENTS
Rybkaover 20 years agoI agree in general with Maria. My further suggestion would be to use some line breaks and create a more "poetic" form.
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Maria2394over 20 years agoin this poem. I think though, that if you condensed it a little bit, lose some of the words that are just "there" it would be more effective and well, clearer . I hope you continue to write and post, it will be interesting to watch you grow here on Lit :) maria
